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New V-Dog Da Menace Shit!!!!!!!!!!!

Postby V-DogDaMenace » Sep 12th, '05, 20:27

I'll introduce this NOVICE TO HELL and SLAUGHTER HIS HEALTH, rip-your-bitch-text then pistol-whip-Tec like dude, stop being so "HARD ON YOURSELF!"/
Reapers at throne, hope he's GUARDING IT WELL, just STOP MOCKING THE BARS PLEASE, I'll let the COPS WATCH AS I SPARK HEAT, pull out the 'yellow tape' and play 'hopSCOTCH' ON THE 'CHALKED' STREETS!/
but you aint WORTH IT WITH SEMIS so I'll use this VERSE OR MACHEDES to turn this HERB TO CONFETTI, in the DIRT YOU'LL GET BURIED, fuckin put you under the floor, wait, too late, i MURKED YOU ALREADY!/
Just giving my HEAD A NOD MY APES WILD-BERRETAS SCAR YOUR FACE...BLAOW, you BETTER PAWN THAT FAKE STYLE, and "yo, get off my dick", look what happened to 'CHEDDAR BOB ON 8 MILE!'/
HOLD YOUR TOUNGE WHEN GOD'S COME, Hope yer FOCUSED SON IT'S A PROBLEM, u tryna name yourself after a gun...cause you love to get "LOADED FROM THE BOTTOM"/
im a TITAN WITH LINES YO-KNIFING THIS GUY SLOW, So this battles a "miss-match" like the WIFE OF A PYRO!!/
im CHRIST TO APOSTLES, kiddo, I'll leave you SWOLLEN AND DYING when HOLDING THE IRON cause plain and simply, your Azz-Tec, i'll play the ROLE OF THE MAYANS!/
heard your KNOWN FOR THE RIDING, you cant SIT WHEN THE SADDLES BROKE, duck for cover, in my INFAMOUS BATTLE MODE ill fill "hayzi with more bullets" than GTA 'INFINITE AMMO CODES'!!/ oops


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Postby HAYZI » Sep 12th, '05, 20:56

how long that take you?hahaha :lol:
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Postby eminemcaparica » Sep 12th, '05, 20:57

man, that was hot bro. propz

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Postby AspirinE » Sep 12th, '05, 20:59

i gave u an 8


ORIGINALITY


Im feeling ur lines and ur words punch and all that but man cmon u gotta try sumtin but battle rhymes
coz ill shit talk is eazy not that im saying this one isnt good

but maybe next time ull make up a story of some kind, put some deeper thoughts in the rhyme

and man.. NICE WORDPLAY


Peace!
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Postby Tomega » Sep 12th, '05, 21:00

Ur rhyme is great bro
i like your flow
well, u'll survive a death row
so let me know
ur style aint low
u can earn a lotta dough
damn, it's good, so
good luck with your demo
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Postby HAYZI » Sep 12th, '05, 21:01

thats what i was sayin to the boy the other night givin him advice and shit i diss him in a game and he cant fuckin take it
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Postby Tomega » Sep 12th, '05, 21:03

HAYZI wrote:thats what i was sayin to the boy the other night givin him advice and shit i diss him in a game and he cant fuckin take it


if that's true he's fake, but i don't know the real story so i respect both of you
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Postby V-DogDaMenace » Sep 12th, '05, 21:03

HAYZI wrote:how long that take you?hahaha :lol:


what u meen?
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Postby V-DogDaMenace » Sep 12th, '05, 21:04

Tomega wrote:
HAYZI wrote:thats what i was sayin to the boy the other night givin him advice and shit i diss him in a game and he cant fuckin take it


if that's true he's fake, but i don't know the real story so i respect both of you




iz u talkin bout me?
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Postby Tomega » Sep 12th, '05, 21:06

Yeah
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Postby V-DogDaMenace » Sep 12th, '05, 21:08

Tomega wrote:Yeah




u sayin im fake nigga?
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Postby Tomega » Sep 12th, '05, 21:12

V-DogDaMenace wrote:
Tomega wrote:Yeah




u sayin im fake *****?



READ what im sayin. I said: IF THAT's TRUE, but i dont know if it's true. And then i said i respect u !
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Postby HAYZI » Sep 12th, '05, 21:14

i was givin him all kinds of advice i even offered him sum of my fuckin beats then hes fuckin switchin over nutin
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Postby V-DogDaMenace » Sep 12th, '05, 21:14

Tomega wrote:
V-DogDaMenace wrote:
Tomega wrote:Yeah




u sayin im fake *****?



READ what im sayin. I said: IF THAT's TRUE, but i dont know if it's true. And then i said i respect u !



oh ight, but dont diss me my nigga cuz we cool, dont diss me not even playin around cuz imma take shots at eny1 who disses me, ight my homie
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Postby HAYZI » Sep 12th, '05, 21:15

i even fuckin said if i make it id take da fool wit me but he can fuck off hes on his own now
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