Commiting Suicide..

[Flamez]

Tried committing suicide 3 times but failed
i swear i almost nailed it almost prevailed
a derailed train out a breathe exhaled
tried again and again but was scared unprepared
felt impaired too stupid to realize that everyone cared
felt angry as hell depressed and weak inside
cried tears won't deny felt it was the end and died
hated myself so much for not being strong
i know now what i did was stupidly wrong
afterwards all day long for hours i sat in bed thinking
with my eyes tired swollen all red barely blinking
thought about drinking but no for what for nothing at all
to drown myself in alcohol for no reason it was a close call
but now i'm standing tall everyday starting from dawn
keeping my head with my mind straight cuz life goes on

feedback appreciated..

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

It's good. Btw don't ever turn to the alcohol thing, my uncle did that n got alcohol poisoning and it could of killed him if he wasn't fast enough to the hospital

drink killed 2 of my uncles and its goni kill me to

did read it all ut had some real nice ryhming

[Flamez]

thanx for the feedback..
naww i won't turn to the alcohol thing..
and bar that sux man sorry ..


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[Rae]

aww hunn.
thats was great!
i didnt know you could write like that!

keep it up.
glad u didnt commit suicide.
1 of my friends did in Nov. i've missed him ever since. i think about it everyday. i also tried to @ the beginning of last year. glad i didnt 1/2 tha time.

but yeah if ya ever feelin down. im here to talk 2

[Infliction]

word nice rhymes, i been there b i feel you, that thought crosses my mind nearly every day of the week, not gonna get into my attempt. Great writing keep it up

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

word nice rhymes, i been there b i feel you, that thought crosses my mind nearly every day of the week, not gonna get into my attempt. Great writing keep it up

im on a serious note here coz it confuses me alot

why would anyone try commit suicide or even think about it, and dont say its coz life gets to hard coz if life was supposed to be easy it would be, and im serious i aint starting arguin or disrespecting but too me if you wanitng ot try or think about commiting suicicde your weak, and i have thought about all the scenarios and ive been i many of them, butnever have i thought of it and it confuses me why people think of this...

[sinemm]

i hope you always remember what i think bout it..what i told ya bout it..you know some secrets bout me and you know what it means to me..and i neevr wanna see u like that..n never wanna hear sth like that again..u promised me dont forget..hugs nice lines btw n lifes good even tho sometimes shit happens..i told ya alot of ppl have more reasons to commit suicide than you but they dont give up..i know you know what i mean..dont forget what i say to u..hugs

[Flamez]

i hope you always remember what i think bout it..what i told ya bout it..you know some secrets bout me and you know what it means to me..and i neevr wanna see u like that..n never wanna hear sth like that again..u promised me dont forget..hugs nice lines btw n lifes good even tho sometimes shit happens..i told ya alot of ppl have more reasons to commit suicide than you but they dont give up..i know you know what i mean..dont forget what i say to u..hugs

thanx sinemm yea hunn i'm a keep promise ok i will never forget what you said never will and thanx again...hugs

[sinemm]

glad to hear it..n u welcome

[Flamez]

and thanx for the feedback all of you...

[4D]

Great stuff man, you have a cool style and way with words, it all flows nicely, the way you use them. You should post rhymes more often man, definitely got something worth working on!

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

its kool.......nice ryhmes there

[Flamez]

Great stuff man, you have a cool style and way with words, it all flows nicely, the way you use them. You should post rhymes more often man, definitely got something worth working on!

thanx man i am gonna post more rhymes


and thanx em50inem

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