Know me

[Golden]

YOu say u wanne get to know me, you tell me you wanne talk to me, you say u wanne bee with me.

You can`t take that chance you see, you can`t get to know me,
I`m gonne rip ur heart out, pull u down, make u suffer, like i do all the time
Look at this rhyme, and tell me Im worth it
I cross the thin line all the time.
I`ll never admit shit
You know..it`s about time...My life..

My life started out just fine, my mom singing rhymes
Tellin` me i was gonne shine
Then suddenly i became a fucking swine
My dad got drunk alle the time, hit me with sticks, sreaming at me
U wont amount to shit, now take a look at it.
My dad left our house cuz off me. I`m dead now, u see`?
Now enters step daddy..
Now..he just hates me, despites me.
, bMy girl entered the world, my baby babyblue eyes, dark hair, no hair down there
we shared everythin` then suddenly we fucked it right up
Fuckin` around, doing drugs, get in fights, but u were always there right.
U held my hand, u were everythin`
Then i made a mess out off u, saying i never wanted u, tellin` u were nothin`
But still we were fuckin` cuz i never could get enough off u
But then i just flead
Remember your mom calling and saying he was dead

OK. can someone help me to get this in a right structure?

[sinemm]

its nice..deep..n some good lines there..good job..liked it..

[sebastien]

i got problem to translate but it's pretty good

[Golden]

Thanks.. can someone please tell me how i can make it better..

[MoBrat]

Thanks.. can someone please tell me how i can make it better..

good stuff...well first try using non-basic rhymes like words everyone has rhymed off a million times before and structure well just try'n make ur lines as even as possible without it messing up the flow im not the best to be giving tips but i hope that helps a bit

[Golden]

Ok..i know the words are a bit ommon..but im not that good in eng.
But ould u give me an example off a better flow?