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Flamez Bouncin' Back...

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Flamez Bouncin' Back...

Postby Flamez » Feb 3rd, '07, 21:14

Flamez bouncin' back reloaded lyrically exploding
rhythmically flowing boiling turbulently unloading
withholding angerness scolding back eroding
unfolding raging flowz predispose rhymez expose
flamez arose heavily glows decomposing hating foes
superimpose gaining respect inside rap shows
started rappin' police froze on the ground bowed down
drowned S.L. faggots Wearing the AZ emcee crown
tearing down wannabe rapper clowns around town
astoundin' profound sounds banging inside your ears
conquer all fears no crying tears destroyin' careers
haterz appear all over fuck ya'll hate me keep hating
creating lyrical threats in high rating grating berating
ready and waiting debating negating viciously ambitiously
mysteriously expeditiously suspiciously venomously
slaughtering haterz sick slick mexican lyrical master creator
flamez back in writing mode again a deadly terminator
paper n' pen haterz let the shotclock countdown begin
start counting down 1 to 10 flamez back at it again

i lost the rest smh lol....

feedback appreciated...
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Postby Global » Feb 4th, '07, 00:44

Love the Rhyming it is great 10/10 :thumbsup:
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Postby Flamez » Feb 4th, '07, 08:55

thanx :8)

anymore...
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Postby sinemm » Feb 4th, '07, 16:25

thats cool..good flow n rhymes sounds cool i guess..good job..
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Postby Flamez » Feb 4th, '07, 20:25

thanx sinemm :8)
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Postby Enimee » Feb 6th, '07, 04:14

dude flamez your vocab and wordplay has really stepped up in this as well as flow AND multis i need to get chu in some exclusive ish ill peep u lata tho

keep up the good work
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Postby Flamez » Feb 6th, '07, 06:13

thanx enimee :8) aight and thanx again for the feedback :happy:
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Postby MoBrat » Feb 6th, '07, 06:28

hmmm i thought i left feed on this before weird.....

i agree with what they said thats some really good lines it's got a lot to it good flow, good sturcture, good vocab and multies :thumbsup: thats some sick sh!t

:laughing: u lost the rest lol
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Postby Flamez » Feb 6th, '07, 06:36

lol thanx for the feed MoBrat :happy:

lmao yea i lost the rest sux...lol
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