Perfect Verse

[JMG]

my eyes are open now,its time for these rhymes to be broken down,
so its time for my mind to be open now,close my eyes im floatin now
is the how im suppose to sound how am i suppose to flow,
am i goin with the beat when the time comes i hope i know,
i got get ready cuz i dont wanna blow the show,miss my chance
cuz when im old and grown i want my kids to dance,to my classic tracks,
make people piss there pants with my platnuim plaques,
i want shows from the front to the back to be packed,
i want to be on top of the world in fact like an acrobat,
but i gotta dripple down court on my own,one man team no support from home,
its not that i wanna afford a phone, or dont wanna start starvin
i just wanna sell out the geogia dome, and madison square garden
cars and stecth limbosenes are just fine but im stuck to
these far fetch dreams of mine, i just hope they come true,
no more money bummin if it means life or death,
cuz ill just have money commin from right to left,
i just hope diggin in my mind for rhymes wasnt just a worthless search,
but they wont cuz time after time i just come up with the perfect verse,

[D@vid]

good story to it, but the rhymes were kinda basic, but a lot of multies, and i guess the rhymes became a little better at the end.

[JMG]

if i wanted the rhymes to be better then i could make the better but how often do u see hit rap songs that dont have basic rhymes like lil wayne and young jeezy so it aint all about how basic it is

[D@vid]

if i wanted the rhymes to be better then i could make the better but how often do u see hit rap songs that dont have basic rhymes like lil wayne and young jeezy so it aint all about how basic it is

they're only hits cuz stupid ppl that have no taste in music like that shit. i never said that shit was good, so to me it sucks. sorry

[DjSnax]

it depends how its rapped if its ganna be good, like ive heard eminem say some shit so retarded, but makes it sound good, but if it was stat quo or 50 cent sayin it youd just laugh or be like 'what the fuck...?"

[JMG]

ok find me a fuckin song where some rhymes aint basic and lets see how much of a hit it was why wasnt infinite a hit bitch if i wanted to spit vocabulary i could

[Ka0t1c]

those are good lyrics, you just need to work on your structure and add a few little simple words to it in order to make it flow, for instance:

"but i gotta dribble down THE court on my own"

but if it were me i would say in order to make that sentence work with the next i'd write "but i gotta dribble down the court alone"...

[Kez]

ok find me a fuckin song where some rhymes aint basic and lets see how much of a hit it was why wasnt infinite a hit bitch if i wanted to spit vocabulary i could

Infinite wasn't a hit because Eminem didn't have much/any publicity at the time.

[$0 R3@L]

ok find me a fuckin song where some rhymes aint basic and lets see how much of a hit it was why wasnt infinite a hit bitch if i wanted to spit vocabulary i could

if i wanted the rhymes to be better then i could make the better but how often do u see hit rap songs that dont have basic rhymes like lil wayne and young jeezy so it aint all about how basic it is

dude you posted for feedback,you got it.Dont git arse hurt cause you didnt like the feed.Remember we aint all clones and like the same thing.

[DjSnax]

most rap lyrics are simple, i just dont get how you freak out when people give you a little criticism but you still wanna criticize other people in the same way.

[JMG]

fuck u ur rhymes sucked mine are good

[thetruthisback]

my advice to you would be to shorten your lines and add more complex rhyming cause if you leave it like that it's sort of simple

[C-Game]

my advice to you would be to shorten your lines and add more complex rhyming cause if you leave it like that it's sort of simple

hey steve i thought ur ban was over already...

[$0 R3@L]

my advice to you would be to shorten your lines and add more complex rhyming cause if you leave it like that it's sort of simple

hey steve i thought ur ban was over already...

why he banned?

[C-Game]

my advice to you would be to shorten your lines and add more complex rhyming cause if you leave it like that it's sort of simple

hey steve i thought ur ban was over already...

why he banned?

lol over some bet with j_shady...nuttin serious