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Where Im From

Postby IceAxe » Apr 26th, '07, 01:52

Basically, a [half] verse about my location in the world. As you'll see, it's really mixed up


farms and shit, fake thugs with no arms or clips
alarms slip off when soneone shakes slight scripts
Lakeside crips who awake and decide they ship
flakes quip about what they rip, and when they take shit

then there's those who blast your ass when their pasture's passed
big contrast to that last tetrad, all get harassed if not in their class
rednecks, fat bastards who want the black kids in caskets
its past hid everyones on track with it , theres a lack of lids.....

...then I hit a wall.


-ship- drug trafikking
-Lakeside is a suburb near where I live
-tetrad- cardinal number that is the sum of one and three > the previous 4 lines

Feed Appreciated


I'll finish this later...... If I feel like it
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Postby Tash8 » Apr 26th, '07, 02:52

love it! man maybe we should collab about our shittly locations.
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Postby IceAxe » Apr 26th, '07, 02:57

^actually, good idea.... plus I've written more for this than for our original idea
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Postby Tash8 » Apr 26th, '07, 03:09

lol haha aite :D cool then, which beat though
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Postby IceAxe » Apr 26th, '07, 03:11

^ idk... i think the first one might fit more, but i got another i was workin on... it's be availible to ya soon and we'll decide from there
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Postby JMG » Apr 26th, '07, 03:24

its good but where to u live at in va cuz i used to live down there and i no what u mean about them racist hicks i lived in patrick county u heard of it?
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Postby IceAxe » Apr 26th, '07, 03:26

Nope, havent heard of it... im in Fredrick County
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Postby James R. » Apr 29th, '07, 22:33

Good especially for bein about Nowheresville, VA lol. Had some decent multies in there and even though it was short I still enjoyed it. I think the length helped a bit because it seems like a topic that could be drawn out and lose it's effect. 7/10
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Postby IceAxe » Apr 30th, '07, 20:20

^ thanks man



btw, this is part of a verse from a track I'm doin with Tash8 so any more feed would be greatly appreciated.
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Postby Kojack » Apr 30th, '07, 20:27

Duh! i can't understand how much wack can you be, damn

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My name is Rickie and i got a Dickie. My name is Buck and im here to fuck.
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Postby IceAxe » Apr 30th, '07, 20:32

Kojack wrote:Girl yo pretty nice, let's go for a fuck
you wanna touch my Laborghini chain, and i'm hot
we can go toghether, up in the club
you can bounce your ass, and i can watch
you bouncin' for the Syndicate Team, this ain't a dream
don't excuse your self, just ride on the beat
back in the Crosstown, i can wait for a month
but here in Sicilia, i can't wait to fuck


^ High levels of shittiness.

Now go to Hell
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Postby Tash8 » Apr 30th, '07, 22:39

Kojack wrote:Duh! i can't understand how much wack can you be, damn

'swrongwitcu


fuck off, ice can kill you in a second you little fat bitch
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