Old-Ish verse

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i got a dark power inside of me its called hip hop, well you can try and flee
but you cant, tighten your veins frighten your brains thats what im goin for,
the gore of war, yeh, im deranged motherfucker in the brain so much i claim the game
while i bring the pain its the same ol' name i aint real im confusion or dillusion a illusion
that is loosin or im wining when im sining got the whole world spinning
and im smooth like linnin, i cant explain what i feel i cant explain its real
coz its not, i caught n lock the thought a thought i got taught, well a musta not
people saying i got no chance at this well blow ma dick and take a prance to this
im fucking evil kinevil as i sevre-up your serebal and the fucking game its feeble



the structure is strange coz i wrote it to a beat

its a old verse that aint getting used no more, i picked of a couple of lines from it though and have them in audio now ( yeh recyclin )

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[James R.]

Hahahaha I'm all for recycling. If you write it it's yours to use forever. And that was actually pretty hot. The structure threw me off at first but I definitely understand having to make changes for the sake of a beat. The vocab was pretty impressive and the amount of rhymes you were able to squeeze in was admirable. I felt this a lot. Keep it up.

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

Hahahaha I'm all for recycling. If you write it it's yours to use forever. And that was actually pretty hot. The structure threw me off at first but I definitely understand having to make changes for the sake of a beat. The vocab was pretty impressive and the amount of rhymes you were able to squeeze in was admirable. I felt this a lot. Keep it up.

thx, yeh i dont see the point in wasting the ryhmes so i chop them n stick them in verses for audio, i do it quite alot actually

and yeh i dont even have the beat i wrote it for but it must have been strange for my lines to be that long lol

thx for feed

[Tash8]

nice verse, i woulda loved to hear this on audio.

[shady_soul]

its good, keep up the good work bru'
peace