Nepal

[shady_soul]

Nepal

As the country finds itself in the most fragile and volatile situation,
Yet again another youth loses his faith and pride over his own nation/
Two neighbour countries alarmed, they say they losing their national security,
Its unknown fact when Nepal will sense the developing gravity/
Situation so unstable and unsustainable down with the anarchy,
In the beginning, It was only case of getting rid of the

[shady_soul]

yo guys common!! someone give it a feedback....uppin' uppin' uppin'

[James R.]

That's deep man. I'm guessing you're from Nepal? It has a very in depth view and a lot of emotion. I like it. The only thing wrong is the flow in some lines goes wayyyy off cuz you stretch the lines, usually for the sake of making a point in rhyme. So if you wanna go back and improve just try to knock out some of the unnecessary words and your flow should tighten up like a virgin. And also there were some typos in there that made it a little difficult to follow, but thats no big deal. Nice shit man.

[shady_soul]

yup yup im originally frm nepal but live in the united fuckin' kingdom/ n' a lota' shits happening in there really bothers me, there aint nothing much i can do about but i can write something up, naw sayin? yeah yeah/ glad ya liked it man/ its means a lot///
yo! more feedbacks ppl'
upping