chairs and tables

[dookie]

in love with my best friends girlfriend (true)

now i know what it feels to have your morals torn apart

shot with a poison dart
blown form the lips of the girl with ropes around her heart

and when we see her face out... about and around..
a dull smile shrouded by lies in eyes
and words glued by lips
that cant form the shapes her mind wants to sound
.the start.
i was bound by her walk i get trapped in her smell
im aroused by her talk and the way we both gel
my senses cry hell but my eyes see heaven
n it doesnt even annoy me
when she says shes tired at quarter past seven
i spin on my chair in a wind of lust
chatting spew to him as i stare at her bust
i must
i cant
but i must..
but you cant
he doesnt know!
course he knows
but if he knew i wouldnt be here with you
held to ransom by an invisble gun
under the floors of my heart
im my mothers son..
and the drums beat and the sweat smokes across me
the crescendo is peaking, ive stopped speaking
shes stopped speaking
should i talk? but i cant
but you must
but i cant
but you must
a coat? whys she holding a coat?
shes leaving
shes leaving?
shes leaving
see you tommorrow..
im breathing

[James R.]

In love with your best friend's girlfriend? Wow that's cool, hell of a friend you are. But I don't know you so who am I to judge?

Anyways about the song.. The structure was whack, it made it very difficult to read and because of that the rhyming was off. But regardless the rhyming was simplistic and the song wasn't very complex. The emotion was average I'd say, don't really feel the song the way I could. Some of the lines didn't rhyme at all now that I'm looking at it again. Something that bothered me was the use of the words lust when you're supposed to be in love with this girl, kinda throws the meaning off a bit don't ya think? The end was weird cuz it was like you went schizo. Kinda repetitive. Sounds more like a rock song than a rap song.

[joelle]

nice

[dookie]

it wasnt even a song

it was just words out of my head

and trust me i kno im a bad friend

[James R.]

Oh you should have labeled it, but regardless.