Line length is an extension of tha artist

[Rain Matrix]

I watch actors rap, bring tha house down, I make rafters snap, ellagance thru relevance
as yur laughs fade, my aftermaths made a masters path rage, I seldom sprint 2 tell a hint

I always had this madness that is average, 2 tha naked eye, lost, nay kid I just don't care
I'm waiting 4 tha army 2 arm me, so I can harm these new parties, and tha love I won't share

rains here, even if it's pains tears, I keep dropping my sweet toxins, u can hold yur book
they say my content is nonsense my song vents frustration plus weigh ins that u overlook

it seems everybodys tough, but theres steady not enough feelings or real things this a point, tru
unknown as an olive tree, but I give u all of me, so far life is nice, I never meant 2 disapoint u

[4D]

One of the nicest verses I've seen from you man, especially that last two lines, had a deeper emotional level to it or something. See, it did not hurt or alter your style to keep the lines a more "easier on the eye" length, better structure is a positive thing man, sometimes it's harder to write shorter lines than it is to write long ones, editing them down can be a real challenge, especially trying not to change the flow or complexity of the rhyme while doing it.

I still see you doing the same things with the long multies that sometimes don't make sense, or seem to trip off the tongue rather than flow, they just seem forced sometimes man, This was not meant to be a negative post, it's just that you have a lot of potential, and you definitely can rhyme, but you could try to make multies in plain language with terms like we would say them. For instance the line: "as yur laughs fade, my aftermaths made a masters path rage", it looks and sounds like a good multi, but to think about it, it doesn't really make sense, that's not sayin it's complex, that's sayin it's bad English, the words "masters path rage, trip off the tongue, because it's not something you would ever say, so things like that kind of mess up the flow in your rhymes. When people have to go WTF in a bad way it's not a good thing man. Sorry for the huge reply, it's just I`m sick of not replying to your rhymes, they deserve feeback, more so than most.

Keep up the effort though man, you're definitely one of the most prolific writers on here.

[Rain Matrix]

Thanx, I feel like I'm in between tha vets and tha noobs man, sometimes I'm real good othertimes I barely escape with real, my next drop will make up 4 my earlier transgressions

[4D]

Nothing to make up for man, just keep tryin to improve, that's all we can do. P.s Another thing I like aboutt you man, you don't let negative or lack-of-any feedback phase you or stop you from posting, once again...keep it up.

[DrRapid]

that was gud

[Tash8]

your best yet, finally rain, your starting to make sense, like fordie said, forcing multis is a waste. i do that sometimes too.