rainy day(will accept feedback)

[J Roc]

i float-n-shout when its soakin-out
i went to school an came-back,i need a rain-cap
im all wet,i slipped on the steps,we need nets
its rainin cats-and-dogs,i should pack-the-clogs
whats the guy doinin out ona rainy-day?
shit he may-be-gay,but any-way
its gonna be sunny ina-bit
in the meantime ill listen to syndakit
the rains startin to die-down
time to take back my-town
no mercy,only shit i wanna-do
ill be a guest on donna-hu
tell the world to suck my dick uncensored
piss off the world like if i spun-ten-turds
flip off donna and bang her mama
slap her kids just to make drama
burn her pajama and kill there lama-while-spazzin
tell the whole world she osama-bin-laden



just some rhymes

[Tash8]

i float-n-shout when its soakin-out
i went to school an came-back,i need a rain-cap
im all wet,i slipped on the steps,we need nets
its rainin cats-and-dogs,i should pack-the-clogs

um doesn't make sense, i think

you float and shout???

i should pack the clogs???


anyways, not bad multis, just gotta make them match and fit

flow isn't that good, do you write to a beat?

[J Roc]

i float-n-shout when its soakin-out
i went to school an came-back,i need a rain-cap
im all wet,i slipped on the steps,we need nets
its rainin cats-and-dogs,i should pack-the-clogs

um doesn't make sense, i think

you float and shout???

i should pack the clogs???


anyways, not bad multis, just gotta make them match and fit

flow isn't that good, do you write to a beat?

no beat,guessin i should?

"you float and shout???"
kinda a exageration there,not able to swim so you float an shout for help.make sence?

"i should pack the clogs???"
someone told clogs can soak shit up,kinda exageratin there to.

"anyways, not bad multis, just gotta make them match and fit "
thanks,i was mostly goin for the multies.

[Tash8]

aite, weird way to say the shit

but keep it up, a lot better than when you started.

[J Roc]

aite, weird way to say the shit

but keep it up, a lot better than when you started.

yea i gess a bit weird,thanks for tha feed

[Rain Matrix]

j-roc wrote "the rains startin to die-down"

tha fuck it is

Just playing playboy I had 2 do it

Overall u took time 2 write it so

[J Roc]

j-roc wrote "the rains startin to die-down"

tha fuck it is

Just playing playboy I had 2 do it

Overall u took time 2 write it so

yea its over,bitch j/k

thanks for the feedback RM,startin to put more effort into my rhymes.