yo minister!!

[shady_aftermathzz]

Putting the earth to terrorize world-wide motherfuckers ya better recog-nize,
I want to climb the sky-highs, so im working from nine-to-five,
But the wage ain

[shady_aftermathzz]

*edits the long post after tashs' advice*

a yo tash! is that short enough to get some feed back/

[Tash8]

ok

structure is real bad, it's really hard to read when structure is bad

rhymes compared to ur other stuff are improving, their still simpe but atleast their more complicated simple shit

flow's not that good, download a beat and write to the snares, makes flow a lot easier


just keep working, u'll get better and read 4d's tutorials in rap battle section

[shady_aftermathzz]

thanks for the feed, yeah sure will read 4d's stuffs/ i can't download anything at the moment but i'll get back to it laterz, problem is i hardly get time to write'em stuffs coz' im in the fucking war/ i really wana' get back n' get better at it when its all done/ thanks again for the feed bru'...much appreciated/
peace