One verse [Please read and rate]

[stevethetruth]

dude some nice shit here i hope you record it

as for pointers i really have none lol

so keep it up dude

[NYBalla]

not bad at all, i jus think u shouldnt try rhyming tat much cuz som of sik ass lyrics dnt rhyme,and i think u ran outta wrds so it made som lines cornyish, but tats jus my opinion tho, and its a sik topic tho

[Rae]

i dont think i've read much from you before. but very nice work!

keep it up!!

i def. wanna hear a audio of this!!

[Aft3rmath]

Fucking sick, hope you put this shit on audio, the flow would be crazy i bet!

-Nice work.

[Inches]

Allright man, Its good, but i got soem feed.

Dont rhyme so many words at once, well unles you can pull it off. I can rhyme taht many words at once or att least not fast cause noone will inderstand what im sayin. I like all the rhyming, its great, dont get me wrong! but im just sayin if you took all those verses and all those rhymes you could mix it upa nd amke some kick ass multis and you wouldnt lose any of your killer flow. So try to mix it up a bit more next time is my advice cause then theres more words that rhyme in each stanza and it will catch interest much easier.