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what up

Postby JMG » Jun 23rd, '07, 12:30

respect the genuis or get pulvarized
blessed by jesus to spit solider rhymes
but over time the worlds turn me cold as ice
so im flowin like a poltergiest
roll the dice if u think u can match the flow
i got a gift to rap i just have to add the bow
i dont wanna be a rapper tho
just to stack the doe or watch the money pour
fuck 24's id rather ride on a ugly whore
and fuck a bloody corpse on a dusty floor
JMG wrote: so are you gonna come fight me or not

Menzo wrote:No, I HAVE something to live for.
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Re: what up

Postby Aft3rmath » Jun 24th, '07, 01:18

Its pretty good, could use some work, did you try written it to a beat to see iff the lines flow nice???

Overall for a quick spit it was good.
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