* Superman *

by **sinemm** » Jun 23rd, '07, 21:41

just finished..so..

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i opened my eyes..it was cold..the middle of the night..something woke me up..
got up went to the window looked outside..streets were empty or i just saw the empty parts..

the dreams i had,stuck in my mind..even though i didnt even remember them at all..
i was alone..had nothing to do..nowhere to go..and nobody to call..

didnt turn on the lights..the shadow of the moon was lightening my walls..
they were still there..all the babyhood pics w/you..teddybears and my dolls..

that voice was still in my ears..was callin me..it was comin from too deep..
"now or later..but soon..be patient..wait for the day we will meet"..

its like im in the middle of a bridge..cant go to this side..cant go to another either..
cant live the life i have now..but nor can i leave it behind and look for the better..

tons of thoughts were runnin through my mind and it started to rain..suddenly and heavily..
just like you left..on a thursday morning ..when i didnt know didnt expect..it was untimely..

it was too hard to believe..i dont know how many days i waited for you sit up and cry..
unfortunately i was gettin too old to believe in that u was now a superman in the sky..

i dont know..maybe thats why i keep staring at the sky..maybe i would see you..
or in a random street..just by a chance and just all of a sudden i would encounter you..

would i ?
im sick of the dreams..i need the real you..i need you here right now..
aint you superman?hear me..come here..save my life..
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feedback please..

by **shady_aftermathzz** » Jun 23rd, '07, 22:01

yeah thats cool, really liked it, well described
liked these lines more
its like im in the middle of a bridge..cant go to this side..cant go to another either..
cant live the life i have now..but nor can i leave it behind and look for the better..
keep up the good work :y:

i killed superman

one less job fo' ya....dont look up in the sky lol

by **sinemm** » Jun 23rd, '07, 22:04

shady_aftermathzz wrote:yeah thats cool, really liked it, well described
liked these lines more
its like im in the middle of a bridge..cant go to this side..cant go to another either..
cant live the life i have now..but nor can i leave it behind and look for the better..
keep up the good work

i killed superman one less job fo' ya....dont look up in the sky lol

thanx alot for the feed hun! :flower:

@ the superman thing

i mean somebody about it :angry:

so no jokes pls

anyway
thanx tho hugs

by **Sophie** » Jun 23rd, '07, 22:11

its goood, described well :8)

by **,-,'-{Bar}-',-,** » Jun 23rd, '07, 22:12

it was great for a poem, meaningful and descipt-full lol

nice work gal :y:

by **°[~CHR!$~]°** » Jun 23rd, '07, 22:12

aww its nice hun :y:

pretty good poem :flower:

keep at it

by **sinemm** » Jun 23rd, '07, 22:17

awww thanx alot you all ! hugssss

:flower:

by **Flamez** » Jun 23rd, '07, 22:20

aww this is a great poem i love it good job sinemm :y:

by **sinemm** » Jun 23rd, '07, 22:29

thank you

by **shady_aftermathzz** » Jun 23rd, '07, 22:34

sinemm wrote:@ the superman thing

i mean somebody about it so no jokes pls anyway
thanx tho hugs

hey sowiii gurl, didnt know that

apolozies

by **Aft3rmath** » Jun 24th, '07, 01:09

Great shit...................... :worship:

Keep it up

by **sinemm** » Jun 24th, '07, 11:51

^ thanx alot hun. :flower:

@ s.aftermatzz thats k hun no need to sorry

by **sinemm** » Jun 24th, '07, 16:13

^ thank you huni :flower:

by **$0 R3@L** » Jun 24th, '07, 16:17

yer brilliant,very deep and nice use of metaphors.

Nice work :flower:

by **sinemm** » Jun 24th, '07, 16:20

thanx thanx thanxxxx :flower:

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