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"Fuel To My Fire" **updated with 2nd verse**

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"Fuel To My Fire" **updated with 2nd verse**

Postby Flamez » Jun 24th, '07, 01:32

this is part of my new song that i'm still working on finished my first verse...and now finished my 2nd verse today.. :)

**still editing this**

(Verse 1)

unloading turbulent raging flowz decomposing hating foes
flamez arose heavily glows predispose rhymez expose
superimpose get ready stay steady your bout' to witness the ultimate power
within me this fuel to my fire that i'm a devour this be your last hour
collapsin' like the twin towers but now don't misinterpret what i said
all i said was that you'll collapse to the ground dead lookin' like sliced bread
my lyrics put you in code red come flying at u like bullets aiming at your head
ain't puttin' you in no hospital bed i'm putting you in ya death bed instead
anybody that wanna mess with me go ahead i'll advise i ain't gonna back down from no pussy guys
better recognize if u step on my toes you'll be witnessin' my wrath unfold before your eyes
its no surprise i have snake eyes i stalk my prey when its time to attack its time to demise
its time to die cuz these deadly words are like drugs you'll inhale which you can never exhale
makin' a livin' hell castin' a witch's spell its your last farewell i'm ringing your death bell
time for me to propel like rocket propelled grenades n' start slicing like automatic switch blades
its a surprising air raid attack with the sound of the drums drumming you know i ain't playing charades

(Chorus x2)

your the fuel to my fire the lighter igniter that ignites me up something you can't expire till i retire can't misfire your my inspire to ignite up in fire and it transpires that your the one that injects fuel to my fire

(Verse 2)

if any of you bitches have a problem with me say it to my face dont try to hide it
don't try to deny it come on motherfuckers admit it this is venomous the way i spit it
transmit it thru your mind right between the eyes its like a perplexed illusion
givin' you a cerebral contusion puttin' you in a state of mental confusion
never comin' to a conclusion you know i'm a verbally silent killer
who's iller writting subliminal hidden messages like a horror story thriller
with a serial killer which you got my adrenaline rush pumpin thru my veins
with juices flowing thru my brain you'll end up being hung like saddam hussien
that not even an aspirin well relieve you from your agonizing pain

(Chorus x2)

your the fuel to my fire the lighter igniter that ignites me up something you can't expire till i retire can't misfire your my inspire to ignite up in fire and it transpires that your the one that injects fuel to my fire

(Verse 3) **work in progress**
Last edited by Flamez on Jul 1st, '07, 07:15, edited 3 times in total.
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Re: "Fuel To My Fire" new song i'm still working on..

Postby stevethetruth » Jun 24th, '07, 02:48

like i said on king shady. com good job man :D
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Re: "Fuel To My Fire" new song i'm still working on..

Postby sinemm » Jun 24th, '07, 11:59

yeah ^

good job..for short..hope it'll be good on the audio too..keep up..
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Re: "Fuel To My Fire" new song i'm still working on..

Postby Flamez » Jun 27th, '07, 04:36

thanx for the comments anymore?
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Re: "Fuel To My Fire" new song i'm still working on..

Postby Rae » Jun 27th, '07, 11:51

aww its good hunnie!

haha this is the one that i read some on msn haha

cant wait to see the finished product. :)
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Re: "Fuel To My Fire" new song i'm still working on..

Postby Flamez » Jun 27th, '07, 16:36

yep thats the one rae lol thanx for checkin it out :flower:
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Re: "Fuel To My Fire" **updated with 2nd verse**

Postby Flamez » Jul 1st, '07, 07:16

added second verse :sweating:
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Re: "Fuel To My Fire" **updated with 2nd verse**

Postby C-Game » Jul 1st, '07, 07:21

goood work mate...

da first verse was good ... second well it worked oki for me .. but not as da first :y:
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Re: "Fuel To My Fire" **updated with 2nd verse**

Postby SajN » Jul 1st, '07, 13:03

Good Work .. I liked it :y:

As C-Game said .. 1st verse was a bit better than second .. But its a nice song anyway :y: :y:
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Re: "Fuel To My Fire" **updated with 2nd verse**

Postby Flamez » Jul 2nd, '07, 04:04

thanx for the comments ya i know first verse was better than the 2nd :sweating:
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Re: "Fuel To My Fire" **updated with 2nd verse**

Postby James R. » Jul 2nd, '07, 15:39

Not bad at all. The 1st verse was definitely stronger, had a stronger vocab and the rhyming was a lil more complex than the 2nd. The flow was decent but the longer lines made some of your song seem a bit stretched, a little more rhyming in the middle of the lines will upgrade your flow and keep your reader/listener up to date as to what you're rhyming with. Keep at it.
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Re: "Fuel To My Fire" **updated with 2nd verse**

Postby Flamez » Jul 3rd, '07, 16:00

thanx man :happy:
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