(Poem) Soldiers Cry

[Aft3rmath]

Its a wasteland,
a baren hell,
the land of sand, were many have fell,
they fight and fight for what truley is ours,
freedome among men, with all of our rights and powers,
they stand for what we earned, nothing greedy or unjust,
but for what our fathers found and discoverd for us,
this land, this country we live in today,
brings hope, justice, and a place to begin in a new way,
they fight for us and not themselves,
they fight to the sound of their own bullet shells,
blast after blast the enemy falls,
many have died on our side but still we stand tall,
the enemy is smart, the enemy is strong,
but they know what we fight for is never gone,
because overall, what we fight for is not wrong,
Just face it, we fight harder, and longer,
we fight with a fist of iron, we are clearly stronger,
we fight for pride, integrity , and greatness,
Out of the smoke, lady liberty shines her light on our soldiers faces,
they stand for what we have, and what we will keep,
in the end there is no enemy but ourselves, we are the beast that sleeps.

[stevethetruth]

some nice stuff here man only thing i can say to improve on is the flow, cause some of the flow was off
but other than that good job

[shady_aftermathzz]

i was feeling it, nice work
we'll always continue growing, no way down...keep up the good work bru'

peace

[Rae]

i agree with steve.

but its not bad steve tells me that ALL THA TIME. haha


but i like it.
i love the message.
good job hunn!