Some quick lines. Please read and leave feed. ( rhyme practi

[Inches]

Forget about lyrics for a second, and think about the spirits that were wreckin
Use the rest of your senses, it should be mines and diseases were detectin
Sons and daughters getting raped, Suns and waters get reshaped
The conclusion is pollution is the reason that the seasons weather is caped
West and East coast blow chronic in the air,
The people who are best and least throw toxins in the air,
This aint a song with a beat, noone listens anywhere,
Just like that aint a thong in the seat, its a white girl with hindu hair


lmao. dont ask about the last two lines i just HAD to put em in lol
what you think?

[Tash8]

yea the last 2 lines were weird haha

nice multis, keep it up structure is a bit fucked though

[Inches]

structure smucture

[4D]

I liked it man. By your first line i thought it would be a simplistic rhyme, but you put in some nice multies. Only one that seemed a little forced to me, was the "weather is caped" one, part from that it all flowed well in my eyes. The structure looks off, but it still flows, so yeah structure smucture.

[Inches]

I liked it man. By your first line i thought it would be a simplistic rhyme, but you put in some nice multies. Only one that seemed a little forced to me, was the "weather is caped" one, part from that it all flowed well in my eyes. The structure looks off, but it still flows, so yeah structure smucture.

ahah thanks for the feed man.

actually the "Caped" line i ws gonna put another one after about how its "Caped" with pollutions and stuff

ahaha anyways thanks again

[4D]

actually the "Caped" line i ws gonna put another one after about how its "Caped" with pollutions and stuff :

Ahh, like a city caped in a layer of smog or something, cool, woulda been good. The weather is caped, just doesn't make sense, lol.

[Inches]

actually the "Caped" line i ws gonna put another one after about how its "Caped" with pollutions and stuff :

Ahh, like a city caped in a layer of smog or something, cool, woulda been good. The weather is caped, just doesn't make sense, lol.

ahha i know i know. ill probly think something up now and add it in so it makes sense