A Ways To Go Intro

[Tash8]

It's apparent that my arms are swords and when I write
harm comes to all and blood explodes through the doors
and suddenly it became my fault like I sliced this bitch
for my own delight or itch as if my brain had a crave to kill
a grave to drill and my anger is a shockwave of pills
lined up on a roller coaster and it's a thrill thinking
that my lone words are glock sprays thru the hallways

those are my first 7 lines, basically practicing metaphores/similes/wordplay and not much multis..

please feed thanks

[Rae]

hey hunn
it was good!
i liked it!

keep it up

[Tash8]

thx for the feed

[Tash8]

thx for the feed

bump for feed

[SajN]

Yeah man .. Good Stuff . I like it.

[J Roc]

"and suddenly it became my fault like I sliced this bitch"

that isnt a metaphore/simle unless im missing sumthin


i liked what u did tho,ina rap/battle u just gota rhyme more is all

[Tash8]

^ not everythiing was meant to be a metaphore or a simile haha

but yea thanks...

[James R.]

Metaphors were ehh. Average, but I've seen better from you
Similes were decent but those are easy lol
Multies showed the greatest improvement I think. Showed some creativity thinkin of 3-4 syllable rhymes so kudos for that

Keep at it, definitely good to write short spits to practice all aspects of your writing.