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Re: Completed song - Please review the lyrics. [Audio Soon]

Postby Tash8 » Jul 12th, '07, 05:50

alright well here is some constructive criticism

Rhymes: Too Simple, your basically going to like a rhyming dictionary and rhyming all the words there....
Flow: Not Too Good But Not too bad either
Complexity: none really it's real simple

overall i thought you let your rhymes control what you were saying rather than letting your brain control what your saying with the rhymes

like 4d keeps saying to everyone, there's nothing wrong with thesaurus the more "same-meaning" words you know, the better you can create rhymes and create more complex lyrics'


keep it up :flower:
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