Step by Step (Plzz comment)

[Jay_LP1]

Here is one of my rap song . I don't know if you'll like it or not but hey u can give some reviews so that I can improve . Plzz comment on this

Everyday when I walk down on the free streets
making new rhymes and listening to the beats
watching people walking with their own dreams
without even thinkin what is going in the scene
scene of the world and dark side of life
they all avoid it coz they don't want to fight
as they are afraid and want to stay away
coz in this fight you'll be blown away
someone is gettin killed everyday and every night
but no one seems to care as they are losing their sight
power to see what's goin in the deep
deep in the scene where there is no light to see
you must be thinking what I mean by the scene
this scene is called politics , now just try to think
whats all changing in this world and what all u doin??
just boozing all day and smoking damn weeds

Chorus
so as step by step we walk away from the scene
thinkin' our life is beautiful as it seems
but in reality we are writing our death
death from those creeps as we are in total mess
but everyone is standing and watchin' this show
no one has the guts to stand up and blow
blow them away in their own fight
and change the scene by bringin' some light


so push away , all the tears
lock away , all the fears
coz this will help you to flow
as time has come , to start the show

Chorus
so as step by step we walk away from the scene
thinkin' our life is beautiful as it seems
but in reality we are writing our death
death from those creeps as we are in total mess
but everyone is standing and watchin' the show
no one has the guts to stand up and blow
blow them away in their own fight
and change the scene by bringing some light

[James R.]

Not bad. Just really basic. Decent ideas, glad it's not about some crazy gangster shit. Just try to upgrade your vocab and incorporate some multies in there.

[Jay_LP1]

thnx for ur reply man.

well yh I've to work on my vocab