just read and leave feed please..

[Flamez]

i'm a ferocious exasperated beast coming to backfire
retaliating with my ultimate great ambition to aspire
i won't misfire i swear i'll make you decompose
once i start to spread the flamez i'll incinerate my foes
u know u can't extinguish this global warming i'm producing
i'm reproducing madly like a horny slut when i'm seducing
but i'm happily inducing shooting out words instead of babies
i'm a dangerously feared lyricst like a vicious dog with rabies
attacking so violently you'd think i'm a diabolical terrorist
a blood thirsty vampire flyin' around the world like a tourist
my technique has to have great precision but i ain't purist
my lyrics may be dirty but clearer than the purest water
this is the last line that will finish off this lyrical slaughter

[CaptivatingVokalz]

"u know u can't extinguish this global warming i'm producing
i'm reproducing madly like a horny slut when i'm seducing
but i'm happily inducing shooting out words instead of babies
i'm a dangerously feared lyricst like a vicious dog with rabies
attacking so violently you'd think i'm a diabolical terrorist
a blood thirsty vampire flyin' around the world like a tourist"

I thought that was -c-r-a-z-y- every line struck out at the reader. it started off with a 'cock back sound" and ended off with a bang. love the wordplay

[Flamez]

thanx a lot babe for the feed

[James R.]

It was alright. terrorist and tourist don't really rhyme. The flow was kind of off in the beginning but overall it was decent. I wouldn't say that the lines vokalz posted were amazing and jumped out at the reader because they didn't really jump out to me. You seemed like you were trying a little to hard. Like you were letting the ideas flow through your head but they had to make it through a wordplay obstacle course or something. I can say that you are getting better though so definitely keep at it.

[sinemm]

already told ya
thats fine

[Flamez]

yea i know thanks sin

and James thanx for the feed aswell man and i guess its just peoples opinions cuz i'm getting different ones each time so ya but thanx