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Don't know what 2 call this

Postby Rain Matrix » Jul 26th, '07, 02:56

rains rhymes change minds, like settings in this very flow now
no lame lines, I'll make yur head spin like a merry go round

go on trash talk, but it seems 2 me every key type fights ya haters
concepts u grasp not, even my last drop will be precise like a razor

half ya fake, u'll all have ta wait 2 captivate like dollars do
I can't put all of u, in solitude, and ask u what u call tha truth

notice how I follow thru, methodical chronicles unwravel barely new
tha matrix will promise foes strongest flows some -gravel bury u-

u'll stop quick, when I drop this, tha topic is frost, I shall bring freeze
u talk like cops did, I'm like tha referee's final decision u can't challenge me

broken up, discarded, spoken once, it's gaurded, I might let u play client
I'm spontaneous like stray violence, I shouldn't have 2 tell u 2 stay silent
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Re: Don't know what 2 call this

Postby Tash8 » Jul 26th, '07, 02:57

pretty cool man, i like this :D
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Re: Don't know what 2 call this

Postby Ka0t1c » Jul 26th, '07, 09:33

good stuff, I like this the most:

half ya fake, u'll all have ta wait 2 captivate like dollars do
I can't put all of u, in solitude, and ask u what u call tha truth


it's very good writin
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Don't know what 2 call this

Postby James R. » Jul 26th, '07, 19:59

Not bad. Flow was decent, multies were good, vocab was decent as well. Lines 5-6 were the best. 9-10 were the weakest. Good drop though
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Re: Don't know what 2 call this

Postby Rain Matrix » Jul 26th, '07, 20:17

thanx 4 tha feed, this was practice 4 an upcoming song in text as always -brahh!
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Re: Don't know what 2 call this

Postby CaptivatingVokalz » Jul 27th, '07, 00:24

Nice :) short but nice! I like when you said "every key typed fights ya haters" different*
*~Vokally Blessed Kristen~*
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