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some lyrics i wrote..

Postby Flamez » Jul 31st, '07, 03:09

the blue ink to my pen has run out can't write anymore
collapsin' to the floor out of ideas with my hands sore
i'm like a door slammed shut with my ideas jammed
inside my head crammed full of shit my soul's damned
but hold up i ain't damned i'm just too damn exhausted
from this fuckin' scorching heat wish i was ice-cold frosted
instead of pournin' out sweat like rain drops outta the clouds
i need to be well-endowed with cool water or i'll be plowed
wrapped in a shroud cuz sometimes i feel very dehydrated
my mouth's dry feeling light headed gettin' dizzy being deflated
like a ballon barely havin' air to breathe with the humidity killin' me
mentally fatigued writing lyrics filled with rhymes sweet as potpourri
you got that right all these lines are perfumed to be smelling good
that'll have this fresh scent spreadin' all thru your neighbourhood

feedback appreciated :8)
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Re: some lyrics i wrote..

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Jul 31st, '07, 11:39

like i said everytime..love ur vocab and flow.... :flower:
nice one flamez/kb24
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Re: some lyrics i wrote..

Postby Crazy Sycho » Jul 31st, '07, 17:08

°[~CHR!$~]° wrote:like i said everytime..love ur vocab and flow.... :flower:
nice one flamez/kb24


yea i agree nice vocab and flow "potpourri" :y:
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Re: some lyrics i wrote..

Postby Flamez » Aug 1st, '07, 01:58

thanx u both for the feed :8)
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Re: some lyrics i wrote..

Postby CaptivatingVokalz » Aug 1st, '07, 22:53

Strong writing skills... nice way to start it off. "i'm like a door slammed shut with my ideas jammed
inside my head crammed full of shit my soul's damned
but hold up i ain't damned i'm just too damn exhausted" creative way of saying you have writers block :)
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Re: some lyrics i wrote..

Postby Flamez » Aug 2nd, '07, 00:00

thanx for checkin this out babe :y:
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Re: some lyrics i wrote..

Postby Wallace » Aug 3rd, '07, 20:13

It's cool and well-done, but I admit some words I didn't understand cuz I am brazilian...
anyway was nice.
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Re: some lyrics i wrote..

Postby Flamez » Aug 3rd, '07, 23:44

haha well thanx man
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