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latest crowning achievment

Postby Rain Matrix » Aug 5th, '07, 02:29

homey I only flow free, this worlds eroding slowly, that's what most of us don't see
I do this solely so my life won't be lonely, tha fear is u will never really know me

I opt 4 most 2 watch tha growth, like tha drops I wrote b4 I fought any foes, now it's politics
would I falter if I seriously said fuck all of this, but 4 now I've got 2 go like literally call it quits

chains drag me down, it's hard 2 be happy now, nothing u need 2 be concerned with
every last souls moves toward tha black hole, it's always humbling like 1's earned this

something told me that, it would pull me back, now I'm stuck grasping tha imagined
my fantasies answer me and ya see what's happened, makes me wanna say fuck rapping

dealing with stress, he gives text his best, doing a quick check, reality still leaves cowards shaking
systematic of our making, we spend hours wasting, time on tha same thing their powers taking

so many verses, my work is coming 2 tha surface
this spit don't appeal 2 tha worthless
acts stay in tha circus, my flow merc's this
almost picture perfect tha way I serve it


my frustrations stick like crustaceans 2 my normally tough patience, it was tha demons I saw them at it
those evil fuckers, they help people suffer, and tha legal structure just makes it more problematic

were all in captivity, rapping's is my activity, and tha haters wanna ban tha flow
I rap vividly, tha storms courses may form corpses, cuz ya mans flow is so animal

I see hate, and I can't be fake, I guess now we wait, until tha others relate, if u get this penmanship
tha rain falls, surrounded by tha same walls, I'm tha 1 that changes all these reckless sentences

come beef, when fully unleashed from me, it' would be mythical 2 see my lungs cease
oh yeah, no laughs, u fold back, u hear tha familar old snap, u've arrived at some beast

there's only 1 east, I never hear that much, I stay underground like a meercat does!
this high atlantic tide, is at gigantic size, I'm dope like what u find in a clear sack bud!

so many verses, my work is coming 2 tha surface
this spit don't appeal 2 tha worthless
acts stay in tha circus, my flow merc's this
almost picture perfect tha way I serve it
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Re: latest crowning achievment

Postby CaptivatingVokalz » Aug 7th, '07, 20:49

I absolutely loved this!! I just marked this to my favorite flow in this section so far. Every line was at it's peak...it was sharp edged. It started off with a strong "pop" and then every line following kept getting stronger and stronger...yet there was never a weak point. It was structured just right...the message in this was clear even though you portrayed it through a different perplex perspective...not many can do this. Major props for this!! :y:
*~Vokally Blessed Kristen~*
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Re: latest crowning achievment

Postby Rain Matrix » Aug 7th, '07, 22:36

I try 2 out do myself everytime my hands touch tha keys

that way tha relevance of my message
becomes more and more clear 2 tha people

thanx
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Re: latest crowning achievment

Postby James R. » Aug 8th, '07, 04:03

That was dope bro. Everything was on point. Rhyming, flow, concept, message, all of it. Nice job man keep it up.
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Re: latest crowning achievment

Postby 4D » Aug 8th, '07, 22:39

James R. wrote:That was dope bro. Everything was on point. Rhyming, flow, concept, message, all of it. Nice job man keep it up.


Yeah, very very good man. And you're reply is not even exaggerating, you do seem to improve with every post. Keep up the reign! :D
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