My version of eminem's mockingbird

[patwivo]

i wrote this song to my girlfriend of almost 2 years who i've been havin a lot of problems with
the chorus is slightly changed so i wont write it here's the 1st verse hope u guys like it

Loren, i know i've been mean, and i know you've been down
but i'm here 4ever, so u dont ever have to frown
but it's the other way around, sometimes im sad 2
but its ok, i know i'll always have my boo
do u remember that summer? we were happy as can be
until i lied to u, then it backfired on me
i cried everyday when you hung out with him
that august really sucked, i wish it could've been
the total opposite, a whole notha season
but i guess evrything happens for a reason
i did not want it to be this way, we're always in a fight
it seems like we're strugglin' to ever find the light
but when we find that light, everything seems so perfect
like the stress and the pain is all so worth it
i really wanna work it out with u cuz i love u
i've broken my back to put nothing above u
i wanna hug u and kiss u, i never wanna miss u
your my shoulder to cry on, my kleenex tissue
i wanna get u everything in this world, always remember, ur my favorite girl
my first love, the first thing i ever cared about
I LOVE YOU, I LOVE YOU, i could scream it out loud
when i look up in the clouds, i can see ur face
being w/you, i kno how heaven tastes

[patwivo]

heres the 2nd verse
p.s. its funny cuz i found this site while i was trying to look for th mockingbird instrumental

when u were out in waterford, playin ur little games
i was back in ortonville, tryin to stay sane
i did my own thing but it wasn't enough
i was missing something, and that thing was ur touch
but we've come a long way, we've been through so much
i think its safe to say that we picked things up
patched up the wounds, and all the scars are healed
i love ur whole body from ur head to ur heels
i really admire how u can wake up and look so beautiful w/o the make up
you dont have to dress up like the skanks in our school
like TLC, ur crazy sexy cool
ur my # 1 thing, on the top of my list
and i still wanna hold u even when u make me pissed
and when we kiss, i feel so special, everything inside of me, every blood vessel
ur my fuel 2 my fire, my pen to my pad
except 4 this music, ur the only thing i have
when we're in the bed, u make me feel so good
ur the beat to the song, the engine underneath my hood
december 9th, 2005, thats when our relationship came alive
at the bowling alley with both of our friends, i'll remember that night until the end
i wouldn't change one thing, even all the bad times
i'd give up every penny, every nickel and dime
to make ur life better, for u i'd give mine, i promise u everything will be fine
and down the road, if we're not together
i want u to know that i'll love u 4ever
loren, this is ur song to let u know that i've loved u all along

i kno it prolly doesn't sound like it all flows good but i make it so it does

[patwivo]

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[Xray]

cool work man

[patwivo]

thanks i cant wait to record it and show my girl

[shady4life!]

yeah that was pretty good, quite simple, but for this type of song the content matter more than flow. Anyway good luck with the recordin

[Ka0t1c]

very heart felt, keep it up

[Inzanity]

this really good some of the rhyme's are basic but then again the rhyme's in Eminem's version are basic to lol but anyway it really was good I liked it nice job

[patwivo]

i wrote it all in one night, thanx a lot

[Inzanity]

hey I was just wondering when u record this u think u could post it up in the audio section so I could download it cuz' I wanna see how it sound's as an audio

[patwivo]

dude i have no idea how to post audio shit.....but u could tell me