More Practice

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

a grab the mic wit might that fright the light back into the night
im just that bright or dark, i got the right to spark
you aint that tight to start with me
a rip you apart you see, throw you in the trash
when i spit from the heart and go to you in a flash
Kill you so fast they should call me gordon
and im so twisted they could call me warden
lock you fakers in a cage shake it till you takers of my rage
you the wakers of my page why all ya'll still shaken by my age
listen my punches never missing my hunch-is that there hissing
is the reminicising of my fist you were kissing


lost it in the last line

anywae some people might not know but i guess most will

Flash Gordon - a superhero who's ability was being as fast as light or sounds, somehting like that#

just practicing some more since i had got more time now to practice, so feed

[Tash8]

ur rhymes need some polishing

light, bright, night, simple man

u gotta use slant rhymes and make them more complciated, when i read it, i like to be able to be told it.. if that doesn't do that then i'm not feelin it...

keep at it though.

[shady4life!]

oh no ..... B-Bar....wat happened to u? Wat happen to ur rhymes and flow?.....they they're worse than b4!
Did u really write this!
sorry man but u need more practise


okay i know i exagerated but u're right u do need more practice. Keep at it and u can be better than u were before.

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

^ lmao, i know what to do and how to do it, just got to get the motivation back to put in 100%

and getting told it sucks gives me a reason to get back on level, hence why i post


@tash, yeh man, i was getting back into the mood nearer the end (with better rhymes) then i just lost it n couldnt be arsed

thx for checkin

[Flamez]

u won't prolly read this since u won't be able to read this lmao but i'll still give feed anyways..

well it is kinda simple by the rhymin' but u'll get back on track climbing up to be number 1 haha, but keep at it man..practice makes the maestro