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nothing big at all (first and second verse done..)

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nothing big at all (first and second verse done..)

Postby stevethetruth » Sep 6th, '07, 20:23

(intro)
yeah, when two people fall in love
it will never change, that true love will always remain
no matter what happens, it will forever last

(verse 1)
i will always love you no matter what you do
it's just me and you just us two staying strictly true
honest i promise i will never leave you alone cold
without a sweater i'll be by your side till we grow old
we'll be together no matter the weather it's forever
i never thought this shit existed till you came to the picture
but see there's a difference between those other girls
you love me for me and that means the world
so here i am wanting to abide by your side
we'll be together forever we'll never collide
no lies in my mind your mine so blind lost in time
no rewind, happy and lifted spiritually inclined
it's like a new feeling revealing every single day
you keep me moving soothing in so many ways
your mine no one else can have ya,i'd rather grab ya
and tell you, but there's to many thoughts to gather


(verse 2)
i wanna throw my arms around you every time you pass
then thoughts hit me, will this relationship even last
it's strange when shit hits you dismisses you like that
you wanna fight back level headed and just attack
but when your ready you realize why your still there
it's cause the feeling she gives you is nowhere near
fondling with her hair bonding, never feeling despair
just happiness and cares and that shit's very rare
losing control taking short breaths what's coming next
butterfly's all through my chest damn love is complex
so blessed and impressed that you feel exactly the same
my life would be a mess without this attractive dame
clinically insane there's too many things to name
and if you left me my thoughts would forever be detained
i shouldn't couldn't wouldn't dare to file a claim
cause to read those thoughts and not feel em i'd go insane


this is a track i'm working on for this couple that are getting married, they asked if i could make a song for them and i said yeah sure, and if it's done in time i will be performing it at their wedding =D
Last edited by stevethetruth on Sep 8th, '07, 19:50, edited 9 times in total.
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Re: nothing big at all but i just wrote it

Postby patwivo » Sep 7th, '07, 02:09

i like this alot it was kind of touching
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Re: nothing big at all but i just wrote it

Postby stevethetruth » Sep 7th, '07, 02:49

thanks a lot man :)
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Re: nothing big at all but i just wrote it (added more to it)

Postby -[Zach]- » Sep 7th, '07, 03:09

:y: nice man. the couple is gonna love it.
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Re: nothing big at all but i just wrote it (added more to it)

Postby stevethetruth » Sep 7th, '07, 13:41

thanks man :y: :)

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Re: nothing big at all but i just wrote it (added more to it)

Postby Xray » Sep 7th, '07, 13:53

Nice piece of Skills man :y: keep the good shit going by the way mayne we needa colab u a rapper on my list that i havent collabed wid from TR so if you damn let me know :y:
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Re: nothing big at all but i just wrote it (added more to it)

Postby stevethetruth » Sep 7th, '07, 18:32

thanks for the feedback man :y:

and yeah i'm def. down for a collab sometime :)
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Re: nothing big at all (first and second vese done..)

Postby stevethetruth » Sep 8th, '07, 19:47

yo added another verse, check it out and leave some feed, like if it could flow better and whatnot, cause i will be performing this in front of people in a week lol
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Re: nothing big at all (first and second verse done..)

Postby stevethetruth » Sep 9th, '07, 23:45

thanks ang :flower: , bump :y:
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Re: nothing big at all (first and second verse done..)

Postby stevethetruth » Sep 14th, '07, 14:43

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Re: nothing big at all (first and second verse done..)

Postby SajN » Sep 14th, '07, 17:14

Nice man.. The couple will love it.. :y: :y:
I liked how you wrote it...:D
I actually try to write like that, but since my english isn't so good, the sentences get bad...
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Re: nothing big at all (first and second verse done..)

Postby stevethetruth » Sep 19th, '07, 02:59

thanks a lot man :y: :)


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