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Its been a while....... Feed back please

Postby lil_bayly » Oct 20th, '07, 08:03

How many times I gotta call him out
How many times I gotta take my big dick and shove it back in his mouth
He aint tough he’s just acting it out
When I found him at his girls this little pussy ran back in the house
And he jumped on the phone, scared cuz I caught him alone
Crying to his boys’ cuz Gino’s outside of his home
I’ll take a baseball bat to the side of his dome
I can sense the fear living deep inside of his bones
Now he running around watching every step that he takes
He knows the next time I see him he’s gotta plan an escape
A lesson learned the hard way; you gotta watch what you say
You aint got no facts, so how can you accuse me of rape
So let’s air it all out and let these people know the story
You’re a welfare kid, poor in every category
You talk tough but aint tough, if you are then show me
You want the crown from the king, then come and overthrow me
This mother fuckers confused, is he black, white or Chinese
According to his Facebook pics, he’s all 3
Standing up against a brick wall, but what do I see
Nothing but a bunch of pussies posing like they all g’s
Ha-ha, whoever said being Chinese makes you a thug
When you’re all 100 lbs and stand at 5’1
Talking all this bullshit that you aint capable of
I even heard this one chink talking Jamaican, what’s up
I aint ever gonna squash it, I’ll spit till im exhausted
And make the city think this mother fucker Gino’s lost it
I aint Snoop Dog but I paid the cost to be the boss kid
When I catch you ima do more damage than the holocaust did
Asians in my city, they all think that they amazing
They dream of being me so they can stop the paper chasing
Building cars in the garage but still acting Caucasian
Slanty eyes and yellow skin won’t let you in this place son
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Re: Its been a while....... Feed back please

Postby lil_bayly » Oct 20th, '07, 22:13

30 views and no feed back? Ya'll can read right?
Or is it that my verse left ya'll speechless?
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Postby Crazy Sycho » Oct 20th, '07, 23:09

:whistle: yeah...speechless
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Postby Enimee » Oct 21st, '07, 05:38

sick structures off tho but it flowed in most places and it went def hard keep at it
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Postby lil_bayly » Oct 24th, '07, 03:54

thanx for the feed, anyone else?
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