RELIGIOUS EXTREMIST

[Arabian Shady]

chech, check, this 1 is ReLiGiOuS ExTrEmIsT:
here goes

I SIT BACK ON THIS RAG,
WITH A PEN AND A PAD, AN AK 2 MA BACK,
N SOME GRENADES IN MA SACK,
ITS SO DARK THAT IT SEEMS , LIKE ITS,
BEEN ,A WHOLE YEAR SINCE I'VE SEEN, MA FRIENDS,
AND MA BROTHERS, IN THE SCENE, WITH THEIR TEAMS,
N IT HURTS N IT HURTS, BUT I KNO,
THAT THE TIME,THAT I SPENT, WITH THEM ,IT WAS WORTH,
BUT ITS GODS WILL AND HIS WORDS, HIS BOOKS AND HIS VERSE,
BEFORE FAMILY AND THE GIRLS, ITS WHAT I PUT FIRST,
AND IN MA HEART I KNO, TO A REVOLUTION WE GIVE BIRTH,
N HE HELPS , N HE GUIDES, SO WHEN WE,
FAIL WE JUST TRY, CAUSE ITS DEATH THAT IT IS,
SO WE SCREAM N WE CRY, BUT AS TIME GOES BY,
WE JUST WILT N JUST PRAY, N OUR FEELINGS-THEY JUST DIE,
BUT FOR THE "GREATER GOOD" WE MUST FIGHT,
IN THE CITY IN THE LIGHT, N IN THE DESERT IN THE NIGHT,
CAUSE ITS IN MA HEART THAT I KNOW,
GODS PLAN -ITS JUST SO ,N THATS WHY,
I DONT THINK, I JUST GO, N THOSE CONFUNDED, THEY WILL KNO,
WHEN FROM MY HANDS THEY WILL GO,
SEE I'M INSANE AND I'M BOLD, I'M POOR THAT I KNO,
NEED NO JEWELS OR NO GOLD, CAUSE THROUGH THE SCRIPTURES I'VE BEEN TOLD,
SO AINT AFRAID NEMORE, CAUSE ITS MA SOUL THAT I'VE SOLD,
N WHEN THEY SAY THAT WE'RE WRONG, THATS WHEN I GET PISSED,
I FEEL MAD, I FEEL DISSED,N WHO DIE-THEY WONT BE MISSED,
SO CALL ME WHAT YOU WANT,BUT I AM A RELIGIOUS EXTREMIST.

YEAH I KNO, I GOT THE WHOLE WAY I AM THING GOIN ON , BUT IT WAS THE ONLY WAY I COULD JISTIFY THE TRACK,
AS FOR MA STAND , I'M AGAINST ALL THIS EXTREMIST BULLSHIT, TALEBAN , AL QAEDA THEY ARE WRONG , I JUST WANTD TO WRITE ABT WAT A GUY LIKE THAT WOULD THINK
HOPE U GET IT, REVIEWS PLEASE!


EDIT:I JUST ADDED A FEW COMMAS SO THAT THE STRUCTURE ISNT THAT MESSY,HOPE ITS EASIER TO READ NOW,REVIEWS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!- 31/OCT

[Arabian Shady]

come on ! not evn 1 review??

just tell me if u hate it, like it wat eva!
just so that i can do sumthin new!!!
hit me
peace

[maximum69]

nice stuff keep it up the flow was a little off but still quality and i real;ly liked that last line keep it coming

[Arabian Shady]

thnx max, i'll come with a new 1 soon

please any 1 else, i'd reali appreciate a review frm 1 of the tr gr8's
peace

[Steve Spag]

Kinda hard to understand it 'cause of the structure. Had some cool lines in there though, just try to work on your rhyme schemes.

[Arabian Shady]

THNX FOR UR FEEDBACK DUDE, I JUST ADDED A FEW COMMAS SO THAT ITS EASIER TO READ!

THNX FOR THE COMMENTS
PEACE

[4D]

I think that's a pretty damn good verse man. It makes more sense when you mentioned that you were inspired by "The Way I Am", because the flow is similar to it alright, although not as fluent. It's good to write about things like this, serious issues, and to be able to write outside of the box, like to imagine yourself in their shoes, cos as you said you don't agree with these people. But it's still fascinating that they do it. I love writing the sick serial killer shit, but i`m not the violent type at all, but it's cool to play the part, lol. Structure wasn't brilliant, try keeping your lines a similar length (Don't have to be exact though), don't capitalise your words, normal text is easier to read, flow was good but there's room for improvement, and i'd say work on more complex rhymes, adding multi's etc. But this was definitely a good verse anyway, you've shown some potential here man!

[Arabian Shady]

wooooo!!!!! o yeah!
thnx fo the review 4d! that was ma aim actually to write sumthing outside the box,
its not all sex drugs n girls!!
will improve n get sum multi's into ma next drop
ne ways apprecitae this truly
peace

more review ppl!!!!!!!!!!!

[Rain Matrix]

this had a cool setting and story

ya flow was just a little off at points

keep dropping this is one tiny notch under dope

as in "pretty badass"

[SajN]

Wow .. Nice one !

First when I read it I was like "WTF, is he a religious extremist??!!"

[Arabian Shady]

non stop: hahahaha , i knew ppl would think like that once they read the title , thats y i wantd 2 make ma stand clear!, props for the review , appreciate it!

R.matrix:thanx a lot man , reviews like that comin frm u n 4d if pretty huge for me! appreciate it alot man!!

peace

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

pretty nice lyrics, flow and structure need some work, but you got some potential just keep up the practice man

[Arabian Shady]

thnx alot bar!!
definately , ma next drop wil have multi's, metaphors, betta structure n better lyrics
thanx alot for the review!!
peace

STILL HUNGRY FOR MORE PPPLLLL!!!!!!

[sinemm]

i would love to express my feelings about Taleban , Al Qaeda and their contemporaries but not right place and i got too much to say anyway!

i liked it..there are some really good lines that can inspire me too if i wasnt lazy lol
and there are some depe lines that i loved
simple sentences and nice thoughts
good stuff keep it up wit that style i can tell you its better
but theres a button on the keyboard >> "caps lock"

[Arabian Shady]

hahaha , u lil' devil!
thnx for the review babe, appreciate it
next drop soon

more reviews ppl , 6 dont cut it !!