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Sadistic

Postby Steve Spag » Oct 27th, '07, 19:23

Don't really know what I'm going to do with this yet. Not finished, I'll finish it up later on.

I'm a little sadistic, I'll tie your leg to the bed//
While I shoot you in the head and watch the sheet's turn red//
I will bite your ankle while I twist your writst//
Because I fight to disable any bitch with lips//
And I know that I'm able to flip the script//
I will jump over the table, my dick you kiss//
My mentality ain't stable, I'm sick and shit//
My life isn't a fable but I spit to kids//
They're watching me like cable, someone hit that switch//
Because I'm labelled unstable 'cause I diss a bitch//

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Re: Sadistic

Postby Tash8 » Oct 27th, '07, 19:33

hmm, idk i like how ur using multis, but your first 2 bars aren't very good, besides that it was nice.
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Re: Sadistic

Postby Steve Spag » Oct 28th, '07, 16:54

Tash8 wrote:hmm, idk i like how ur using multis, but your first 2 bars aren't very good, besides that it was nice.


Thanks much man. Decided to take your advice and start using multies more. I've been using them a lot in my raps recently, lol.

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Re: Sadistic

Postby Rain Matrix » Oct 28th, '07, 19:52

haven't seen many drops by u but this is not bad
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Re: Sadistic

Postby 4D » Oct 28th, '07, 20:24

Nice multies man, liking your style, keep it up! :y:
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Re: Sadistic

Postby Steve Spag » Oct 29th, '07, 04:23

Thanks guys, glad you're liking the new material :).
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Re: Sadistic

Postby stevethetruth » Oct 29th, '07, 04:30

i liked the style you had in this one, the flow worked sick with the multies

good job man :y:
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Re: Sadistic

Postby SajN » Oct 29th, '07, 11:29

stevethetruth wrote:i liked the style you had in this one, the flow worked sick with the multies

good job man :y:

What he said :y:
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Re: Sadistic

Postby C-Game » Oct 29th, '07, 17:55

goood stuff
da verse cld have been better if u continued da same mutlies

somethin like

I'm a little sadistic, as this bitch resist//
ma lips-which-is closin as she desist to kiss//
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Re: Sadistic

Postby Steve Spag » Oct 29th, '07, 19:10

Thanks a lot everyone, glad people are liking this new stuff, lol. I'll post some more lyrics up later on tonight at some point..
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Re: Sadistic

Postby Tash8 » Oct 30th, '07, 00:07

C-Game wrote:goood stuff
da verse cld have been better if u continued da same mutlies

somethin like

I'm a little sadistic, as this bitch resist//
ma lips-which-is closin as she desist to kiss//


not feelin it, cuz the flow wouldn't match what he was trying to do

but i see what ur trying to say.
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Re: Sadistic

Postby 4D » Oct 30th, '07, 10:13

Tash8 wrote:
C-Game wrote:goood stuff
da verse cld have been better if u continued da same mutlies

somethin like

I'm a little sadistic, as this bitch resist//
ma lips-which-is closin as she desist to kiss//


not feelin it, cuz the flow wouldn't match what he was trying to do

but i see what ur trying to say.


I agree with Tash, and you're also forgetting the "Able" internal rhymes. :whistle:

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