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Never Trust Those Surrounding

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Never Trust Those Surrounding

Postby Xray » Jan 28th, '08, 11:06

This verse is mainly about how labels never want truth and how we mess with each others minds just for entertainment.

some of us love drums snares, we kill for those kicks
we write scripts, in day light, untill swet drips
when two gather in the mix crooked thoughts make us swift
tricked into a place a dimension that dont exist
critics love to watch, but majors always skip
a record from a minor, cause minors always trip
but still we rumble in the mud till who ever luses blood
fight for our lives till who ever pulls the plug
stuck with imagination the desaster rotating
nightmares take their part as slavery invading
we all remain in our lanes cause our dreams are quaking
aggression is taking its place cause aggression is overtaking
some of us push without a warning from night till morning
so if one makes a mistake, than trouble we all in
so when we move we take a caution cause life is extortion
and never trust those surrounding cause you'll end up in coffin
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Over a billion Muslims, you could never stop Islam
Over a billion bullets shooting from the chopper's arm
Carry a motherfucker head that I shred in Nam
I speak literally, figuratively, the prophet gone


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Re: Never Trust Those Surrounding

Postby SajN » Jan 28th, '08, 11:44

I've never seen seen something from you here (but that's maybe only me), so I can't say if this is better or not than your usual standards.

But this drop is really good, I like it :y:
The flow is good, and the rhymes are well used.
So this is good.

Keep it up :y:
Could you feed mine too, The Future ?
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Re: Never Trust Those Surrounding

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jan 28th, '08, 13:08

thought it was sick :y:

maybe im looking into it too much, but for me it has alot of metophors, i dunno if you ment to have multiple meanings in the lines if you did then i got it and its sick :y: wordplay aswell again dont if you ment it its a hard thing to know if it was intentional but for me its was sick :y:

rhyming was solid through out and you even got a sick flow in text lol :y:
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Re: Never Trust Those Surrounding

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 28th, '08, 13:53

i like it bro :y:
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Never Trust Those Surrounding

Postby Xray » Jan 28th, '08, 15:54

thanks for checking it out guys thanks alot :worship:

@ Non Stop yea i hardly ever post lyrics here and thanks again man :worship:

btw just feeded your track The Future :y:
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