Outro to Rap

[Tash8]

hahah GOT U

[Vettori]

Wicked shit man, I like the flow especially on this, and nice use of multis Thats how i like to see rhymin done ...and u still heald concept..sick shit man lookin forward to more

[Xray]

dayem now that u highlighted it looks 20 times more lyrical not even 1 word outta line its perfecto

[Rain Matrix]

don't give up on a gift

this was nice all tha way through

[Steve Spag]

Sick flow man. The multies were used very nicely. Probably one of the best peices I've read of your shit. Keep it up.

[SajN]

Really good flow
The rhymes are well used, and nice multies.
I think this is the best I've read from you.

Keep It up.

[Arabian Shady]

sick blend of multis n flow,
YOu n quit hell no,keep this shit up
peace

[Tash8]

thanks for feed people

[Ka0t1c]

i think you're moving in the right direction, im pretty impressed!

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

it was great man, and i could say what everyone else said but that doesnt help anything ya know

the bolding of the 1 syllable out a 2 syllable word is a cheap way to make you text look more complex, in a recording (without sounding very stupid in prounouncing the words) that doesnt rhyme..no point in making it look like it does, you could easily change structure a bit and bash a small one syllable on after Mind to make it rhyme with Blinded

my mind Blead its blinded with dark illusions

simple change but makes it sweater for audio..and (if the beat is a normal tempo and structure) will probly help the flow coz it evens it out a bit

you other multi's like

dark illusions
hard not loosin

are great, broken down and not rhyming big words that look fancy but real words that rhyme greatly


apart form that i aint got much to say, the flow was really smooth through-out and your rhymes flowed greatly with in bar rhymes and end of bar rhymes that never threw each other off, you should keep working on this coz its got a great start and feel for an audio verse

[Tash8]

haha man

did you notice how i onoly bolded mind and blind and didn't bolded the ED?

cuz i know what rhymes and what doesn't

for example when nothing's fusing and enoough with the music

when and en[ough]

kinda rhyme as well i just didn't bold it...

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

haha man

did you notice how i onoly bolded mind and blind and didn't bolded the ED?

cuz i know what rhymes and what doesn't

for example when nothing's fusing and enoough with the music

when and en[ough]

kinda rhyme as well i just didn't bold it...

i know you know what rhymes, what im saying is bolding it is a cheap way to make you text look like there more rhymes, coz in audio it doesnt rhyme...you dont spit "my mind is Blind....ed" so in audio it doesnt rhyme, prounncing it in audio its like "bline-dead" witch doesnt rhyme with "mind" at all...for text its kool, im just talking on a audio level that what i would have done would have just rhymed the full thing..

[J Roc]

"Mind Is" And "Blinded" Rhyme .... So U Coulda Bolded It ..... Your Both Wrong

Lol Its Pretty Good ..... So U Really Quittin? .... Or Juss a Nice Subject To Rap On? ...

[Tash8]

"Mind Is" And "Blinded" Rhyme .... So U Coulda Bolded It ..... Your Both Wrong

Lol Its Pretty Good ..... So U Really Quittin? .... Or Juss a Nice Subject To Rap On? ...

haha thanks, i win bar!!!

for ur other question, kinda... i'm focusing on producing more lately so yea.,

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

"Mind Is" And "Blinded" Rhyme .... So U Coulda Bolded It ..... Your Both Wrong

Lol Its Pretty Good ..... So U Really Quittin? .... Or Juss a Nice Subject To Rap On? ...

haha thanks, i win bar!!!

for ur other question, kinda... i'm focusing on producing more lately so yea.,

*takes shotgun*

you didnt bold IS or ED so i WIN

*puts shotgun to tash's head*

you agree ?