Runaway Love**

[Boston]

im sure yall heard of the song Runaway Love by Ludacris
kind of old..well i wrote a verse to that before (about a year or maybe more) and i decided to write one tonight, im trying to get back to writing.. i start/end like ludacris (first 2 lines, last 4)

but yeah, heres mine
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Little Alli is only ten years old/
Shes steady trying to figure why the world is so cold/
Banned from her house so she lives on the street/
Only people carrying her are the kicks on her feet/
Alli gets depressed so she moves to cocaine/
Dropped out of school so she uses no brain/
Stands on the corners to pay for her shelter/
But all she does is pray for somebody to help her/
So she turns to God and asked where she went wrong/
Jealous of her moms new boyfriend and step son/
Shes so sick of life and thinks the worlds so unfair/
Wants to pull the trigger because she thinks shes done here/
Now Little Alli is stuck up in the world on her own/
Forced to think that hell is a place called home/
Nothing else to do but get her clothes and pack/
She says shes about to runaway and never come back/

[Purple23Haze]

I liked it

[Hadez]

the flow could be better in some parts. but its actually not too bad for a "my version" verse.

keep it up

[Xray]

the flow could be better in some parts. but its actually not too bad for a "my version" verse.

keep it up

co-sign

[Boston]

thanks yall

[Arabian Shady]

wiked
i thought that was sick man,i didnt have ne problems on the flow,structure,meaning thru out the verse.its all gd for me.
very well written
peace

[Epidemik]

i liked it. thought the flow was good.
lyrics were good.. pretty deep
keep it up.

[Boston]

thanks

[preest]

nice idea, lyrics could have been filled out with some multies to make it flow sicker but all in all I liked it!

Keep it up!!!!!

[Boston]

lol no disrespect but every line has a multi
but thanks

ill post something new later, almost done with it.