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Mentally Deranged (Steve Spag 16)

Postby Steve Spag » Mar 6th, '08, 23:17

Just finished writting this peice here. Wrote it to the Shadowville Productions beat called "How You Make Me Feel". It's got a good flow for it, which hopefully you'll get, lol. Let me know what you think please.

I never try my best and I procrastinate//
Soo many faults on my side, I got a lot of bad traits//
Broken relationship's, endless debates//
Going on in my head and I am going insane//
Soo many things I wanna change, if you think you relate//
To this mental derangement which I'd like to exchange//
It sounds cliche, but I've been betrayed//
I could write an essay 'bout the sins I've faced//
Yeah people love me, some people hate//
People say I'm evil, I've been desecrated//
The pain I'm facin', I'd like to explain//
The way I shaped and trained it, it's been rearranged//
If you feel like this, strained out and drained//
Unleash your demon that's contained and chained//
No secrets in me, they're on the page//
Sincerely screaming, this is Steven Spag//

Copywright: Steven Spagnuolo, 2008.

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Re: Mentally Deranged (Steve Spag 16)

Postby Arabian Shady » Mar 7th, '08, 08:07

that was pretty gd steve
lines,meaning,all was gd
wikes shit
peace
ArAbIaN ShAdY


We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


FiNd mE At dA "CREATIVE SECTION", I AM ULTIMATE INNOVATION!!
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Re: Mentally Deranged (Steve Spag 16)

Postby Epidemik » Mar 7th, '08, 11:45

ya that as dope man.
good lyrics! :y:
good flow :y:
good shit!
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Re: Mentally Deranged (Steve Spag 16)

Postby Ka0t1c » Mar 7th, '08, 14:34

hell yeah man, im feelin that right there!
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Mentally Deranged (Steve Spag 16)

Postby Steve Spag » Mar 7th, '08, 17:46

Thanks to all you guys who've fed it soo far, I appreciate it, and glad you're diggin' it :). I don't know if I'll end up recording it, but I'll keep it just incase, haha.

Anybody else got feed?
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