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[Ka0t1c]

its really weak

[Robbie G]

Hmmmm.....

It wasn't extremely complex, but it was alright. I liked the concept, is it made up or true? Kind of remined me of the song Kim a lil bit.

[preest]

reminded me a bit of d-12's track How Come, the lyrics could have been a bit better but i could see where you were going with it!!!

[SajN]

This wasn't so good.
You need to work getting "bigger" rhymes, by bigger I don't mean really big, just some more rhymes and so on so it looks like it's more complex and stuff Really hard to explain it..

To be honest, your second verse was just wack.

Try avoiding using the same word at the end of every line.
Like you did here:

"your not my brother, your momma should of used a rubber
back then again you nasty fuck came from a used rubber"

You didn't have that many rhymes, next time try to rhyme a bit more..
It's good that you're trying.

Keep it up

PS: No hate, I'm just trying to help..