Staying True

[SajN]

I don't know if you'll get the flow, but it is there.


"You read those Articles, saying hip-hop’s About to Die
That’s why you Worship Us, cuz we try keeping it Alive
You say the Art Is Us, you say the Masters Are Us,
And the real Artists Are Us, just Because we’re true to Rap,
But when we turn to Wack, you turn your Back Against Us,
Think we’re trying to be Gangstas, but this just Ain’t Us"


This is just something I wrote today. I guess I'll continue it, and maybe change some lines.

Feedback Appreciated

[Jay-19]

It's not bad, not at all. you got a little multie-thing going on there, but all of it doesn't rhyme, well, at least not to me. but I don't know how you pronounce it. I'll give you the same advice Vettori gave me, try to get more wordplay into it. Other than that, I like it man!

[SajN]

Glad to hear you do like it

Could tell me what doesn't rhyme?

This is just the beginning, and I'll see what more I can come up with.

Thanks for feed

[Purple23Haze]

"You read those Articles, saying hip-hop’s About to Die
That’s why you Worship Us, cuz we try keeping it Alive
You say the Art Is Us, you say the Masters Are Us,
And the real Artists Are Us, just Because we’re true to Rap,
But when we turn to Wack, you turn your Back Against Us,
Think we’re trying to be Gangstas, but this just Ain’t Us"



The ones in bold are just repeats "us" but the word before doesn't rhyme even in my ghettoest lingo that aint actually true freakin agianst us and aint us the two enders for the last two lines in my ghettoest lingo does rhyme

The ones in italic rhyme


I really liked the concept we are the masters and are true to hip hop so I really like that but I would work on it peace

[SajN]

I see what you're trying to say, but it depends on how I pronounce it. I tried to rap it loud and it did rhyme, depending on how I rapped it, where I gave the words a pressure...etc..
But I get your point, and if I can, I'll change it.

Thanks for checking it out, and your advice

[Arabian Shady]

i liked it alot dude
that was actually gd,some improvment since ur last post!
ne ways it'll be gd if u wrote more
peace
sorrie i didnt post b fore,ur new name threw me off!

[Epidemik]

i liked it so far! post the rest if you decide to continue!

[SajN]

Thanks A-S and Epidemik
Appreciate it


I don't think I have any plans to go further with this text.. I didn't really like that much.. but maybe I'll change a bit and fit it in any other text that I'm working on. Which I'm putting more effort in to.