Will I Ever Make It Up?

[Ka0t1c]

so used to being "broke"
and thinkin things a "joke"
it wasnt looking good to me
to bring me some "hope"
it "seemed"
i had to put my "dreams" under "scope"
but at first i couldnt leave the "boat"
i was just a stupid "teen"
but my future wouldn't "hault"
slowly losing "steam" to "float"
in "2000 and 3", I closely took "note"
in "order for me" to get "out"
i saw an "opportunity"
like no "other"
by "joining the" "Army" i'd be "about"
the "honor" when i "found"
this "newly" discovered "route"
that could "free me" from all "doubt"
then my head went above the "clouds"
"overseas" that "sounds" too "easy" i "thought"
which wouldn't "bother" to "amount"
but "now" there's "mountains" where i'm "brought"
and "plus" some of my "brothers" have been "shot"
"while" my "mother" is prolly "shocked"
does she "suffer" 'round the "clock"
i "love her" but can't "talk"
when i really "wanna a lot"
"will" i "ever" make it "up"
"or's" the "drama" way too "much"?
well i've "gotten" outta "touch"
yet i can "never" trade my "spot"

[Purple23Haze]

you shouldn't capsize the rhymes man it sounds like your yelling and I stop after everyone so i cant get the flow

[Ka0t1c]

thats where to emphasize it but ok i'll fix it for you when im feeling better

[Purple23Haze]

I realize that the rhymes are when you emphasize it usually is but when typing putting it in caps reads like a yell and I couldnt pick up the flow very well after the "yell". People used to tell me the same thing so don't even freit btw its a pretty cool piece, peace!

[Ka0t1c]

that's cool, im glad you like this one... i apologize to everybody if it is a hard read for them... i'd do it on audio if it were possible. believe me, its coming, im doing good on money now, just need to be back in the states to make things happen. it's gonna be a fun time for me.