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Postby Steve Spag » Mar 25th, '08, 00:13

Sorry I havn't been around in a while, I've finally been gettin' some recording time so I've been pretty busy between shit. I got a few peices here that I'm workin' on for a song called "Lost". If you bother checking out the beat, it's by Mister KA on soundclick called "Lost".....Anyways, let me know what you think for them.

Verse 1:
I am travelling a desert, seeking for a soul//
'Cause Steven has been freakin' out, weakened as a whole//
Anybody who knows me knows my stupidest qualities//
And I've used up a lot of beats for my music so follow me//
As I take you on a trip but be carefull where you step//
Because the light has been dimmed so don't be slippin' on your neck//
Some memories stick with me, and some have been left//
To be hidden in darkness, I am over with them//
I am over the sad times, they are part of a past life//
That I've put an end to, straight up sent into flat line//
Overdosed on karma, but reborn with strength//
Say goodbye to drama because I'm in a new phase//
I am paying attention, there is no way I'll be played//
'Cause I'm invading your heads and I am planting grenades//
You know where to find me, I parade in the glade//
And I am never alone, that's why you haters complain//

Verse 2:
They know I'm crazy and witty, 'cause I am clever and dope//
But I ain't known in the city for my wickedest flows//
There are no hoes by my side because I'm roamin' alone//
I'm soo frozen and broken there are no jokes on my dome//
Cold-hearted? Just maybe, but my rhymin' is hot//
It's as hot as a sauna that is cookin' some pot//
My temper is risin' so it's best just to watch//
From a far away distance, I am ready to launch//
The wait has been long and the ride has been harsh//
But I have finally made it with no thoughts to depart//
If ever I die before a deal for my songs//
There will be a big webpage with the thousands of blogs//
Describin' my life, it is public I know//
And I push and I'm shovin' but it still will not close//
I'm embracing attention, my life's like a show//
Most characters are fake, which one's? I don't know//

Copywright: Steven Spagnuolo 2008

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Re: NEW Steve Spag

Postby Steve Spag » Mar 25th, '08, 00:24

Chet wrote:screw lost, call that shit Steve's Struggle or something more personal

You were fucking killa on that shit, the last parts of the second verse were dope, good fucking luck trying to make a chorus to go with those sick verses.

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Steve Spag wrote:Copywright: Steven Spagnuolo 2008


Damn I was gonna take it :shifty:


Haha, thanks man, glad you liked it. I actually like that "Steve's Struggle" title man, smart thinkin', haha.

McMaybe wrote:As usual an enjoyable read. I like how you manage to capture exactly what you want to say, without ever sliding of the rhyme scheme.

9/10


Thanks a lot bro. Your reviews are always appreciated :)
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Re: NEW Steve Spag

Postby Arabian Shady » Mar 25th, '08, 18:55

that was exeptionally well written
flow was constant,deep meaning,multis,...
new steve spag shit just became the newest hit
peace
ArAbIaN ShAdY


We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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Re: NEW Steve Spag

Postby Steve Spag » Mar 25th, '08, 21:16

Arabian Shady wrote:that was exeptionally well written
flow was constant,deep meaning,multis,...
new steve spag shit just became the newest hit
peace

Thanks a lot bro. As always, your feed is always respected.
:)

Anybody else got any feedback?
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Re: NEW Steve Spag

Postby SajN » Mar 25th, '08, 21:19

Nice peice as usual :y:
I always like your stuff.. and there's nothing to say any wrong with it.
So.. can't really say more :p

Keep It up dude :y:
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Re: NEW Steve Spag

Postby Wallace » Mar 26th, '08, 16:57

Very well-written. Easy to get flow. A good double-piece as usual as said before. :8)
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Re: NEW Steve Spag

Postby Steve Spag » Mar 27th, '08, 00:48

Thanks Infection and Wallace :y:
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Re: NEW Steve Spag

Postby Rain Matrix » Mar 27th, '08, 01:52

I liked reading it

it was enjoyable man
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Re: NEW Steve Spag

Postby Xplode » Mar 27th, '08, 04:44

it was nice reading it Steve Spag :8) :y:
So Long Bitch U Did Me So Wrong
I Dont Want To Go On
Living In This World Without
You...........
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