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The Big fish

Postby MesAyah » Apr 11th, '08, 20:36

2 verses from my song big fish, its all about beeing crative and is my song dedicated to the artforms


Changing Nursery Rhymes to the masculine
Paintin Versatile Crimes of whets happening
Lecturing in the Form of Rappin
Tellin Tales of unstoppable Wordplays Non-stoppin
Chantin to my own shadows
Meadows of verses creatin curses of chaos
Makin this version outrageous
Like the person that made us
I tip top two steps ahead of my failures
Hip-hop movements turn creatures courageous
I dance through these fables
Placed within a thousand of labels
Doing my labor
Between a segment of layers
Stay stabile, in this musical art hall
Never sold my soul to appear on a Poster wall
I rather be quoted when Nature Calls
As Flowers speak Evolve, and the leaves Cry Fall
And the tones of my voice makes winters cold


With my words I paint the picture
I stand upon murder
Made the sniper-rifle stencil carved from its burdens
A reverend, oblivion to my own existents
My sixth sense
Mixed when
Sick pens write fictions
My sixteenth chapel of common sense
Brick by brick I pick my points of reference
The evidence is evident
I’m level with my sentiments
Sentences rest in frames of disobedience
I make amends to outline the obvious
My novel didn’t write itself
I signed it anonymous,
So I won’t be recognized as fabulous
Let them ask themselves
Who wrote this accomplishment?
Then they see me on stage, screamin towards my presence
The artworks presented, represented my message
The purpose of life is to die with more knowledge than we were born with
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Re: The Big fish

Postby Rain Matrix » Apr 12th, '08, 15:04

not bad at all I encourage u to keep writing :y:
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Re: The Big fish

Postby SajN » Apr 15th, '08, 10:41

Really good :y:
I loved the beginning of 2nd verse :y:
You got good rhymes, and the flow is also good.
Same goes with your vocabulary :y:

Keep it up.


Could you feed mine too? It's named: My verse from Northern Lights. You have heard it before ;)
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Re: The Big fish

Postby Hadez » Apr 15th, '08, 10:52

really nice. nothin bad to say about it. first line was great :y:
very educated lyrics i must say. keep doin what you do man :b:
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Re: The Big fish

Postby Xray » Apr 15th, '08, 14:24

you got talent bro, you can spit dope and write dope. im diggin your style :y:
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Over a billion Muslims, you could never stop Islam
Over a billion bullets shooting from the chopper's arm
Carry a motherfucker head that I shred in Nam
I speak literally, figuratively, the prophet gone


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Re: The Big fish

Postby Wallace » Apr 15th, '08, 17:03

That's was nice, complex vocabulary.

Stay stabile, in this musical art hall
Never sold my soul to appear on a Poster wall


Very good line.
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Re: The Big fish

Postby MesAyah » Apr 16th, '08, 07:44

thnxs for all the kind words fam, it's much apreciated

stay up
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