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Postby <VerbalTouch> » May 3rd, '08, 05:11

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I stand alone wishin I had a clone
Wantin a lone so I can say I own
Never shown always overthrown
I'm grown so let it be known
(x2)

Everyone needs a sidekick in order to stay sick
my stomach feel sso thick My topics always epic
Most my music sound oh so motherfuckin gothic
When I drop a drumstick everyone gets so frantic
Take it to my attic your soft as mothafuckin fabric
Its like trying to solve cubix They act all psychic
My dicks like a yardstick Naw no need for a plastic
I'll flick ya kick ya like your feelin seasick Chick
I unpick you Your like a tic stuck to my lyrics
Fuck bein quick Ima stick to be fuckin gothic (haha)

I stand alone wishin I had a clone
Wantin a lone so I can say I own
Never shown always overthrown
I'm grown so let it be known
(x2)

This is just verse 1 others comin up soon :whistle:
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Re: Music - Upcoming audio

Postby -[Zach]- » May 3rd, '08, 05:18

not bad. my internet is too slow to load up that youtube with the video so i'm only commenting on the lyrics alone. in my opinion some of the words didn't quite fit as rhymes but maybe your pronunciation is different on those words. other then that though i enjoyed the lyrics. very good job :y:
"Did you ever stop to think/I'm old enough to go to war but I ain't old enough to drink" - 2Pac

"It's time to let the truth be told/There ain't no brighter day/'Cause when it all unfolds/A n**** gon' just pass away/These haters tryna stop my grind/But I bet them hoes can't block my shine/So tired of takin' losses not this time/I can't save the whole world I'm just tryna look out for mine" - Z-Ro

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Re: Music - Upcoming audio

Postby <VerbalTouch> » May 3rd, '08, 05:57

Thanks fam :y:
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Postby <VerbalTouch> » May 3rd, '08, 18:51

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Postby <VerbalTouch> » May 3rd, '08, 19:04

Chet wrote:That beat is sick as hell damn :y: :y:

some nice lines and they fit with the beat perfectly, good job. but the dick line doesn't really fit in with the rest


Kinda like how the dick in your sig doesnt fit with your vagina :whistle:
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Re: Music - Upcoming audio

Postby <VerbalTouch> » May 3rd, '08, 19:10

Chet wrote:
djblue wrote:
Chet wrote:That beat is sick as hell damn :y: :y:

some nice lines and they fit with the beat perfectly, good job. but the dick line doesn't really fit in with the rest


Kinda like how the dick in your sig doesnt fit with your vagina :whistle:

dj blue diss is coming soon :angry:


:laughing: dont get your dick bent over it :laughing:
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