there was Once a women...

[<VerbalTouch>]

your not hated I just hate cupid man my mind feels haunted
but i decided to be lightend ive been hung over whats worse busted
my mind was greeted to bad fluid I grunted out the fuckin hatred
I heisted at first I thought I was knighted yes I was damn looted
I pounded and pouted my tears went rusted see at first it was splendid
it started stupid bet we talked and got it suited now my minds twisted
I waited till I damn near had to get wasted yes I sounded fuckin solid
it let on it sprouted outa her I was tempted to run but i was out-smarted


i was bored so i kinda wrote a storyish thing bu tit snot done yet lol

[Rain Matrix]

it's got potential I'd switch a couple of rhymes around

[Ka0t1c]

man, it's alright

[<VerbalTouch>]

it's got potential I'd switch a couple of rhymes around

like what words?