Freestlye I Did On A Myspace Bulletin Awhile Back

[-[Zach]-]

killin' the feelin' of pain wit penicilin
still in my own prison wishin' i was no longer livin'
givin' up on life cuz it ain't never gon be right
we might see light but its fake an' is never there when we like
when is the end of my misery?
can it be that pain is all that was meant for me?
destiny has a funny way of showin' herself
some are goin' for happiness, some are goin' for wealth
more help is what we need 'cause greed
only feeds corrupted minds addicted to weed
i don't know where i went wrong but it happened
actin' like i'm rite when i'm the main cause of all the scrapin'
i can't stand tall so i laugh shit off
grab a strap an' blast it off
actin' all strong but deep inside i'm weak
wonderin' why ain't no one findin' me
why can't we see our mistakes before its too late
we could all do great but we get stuck on fate



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[Nu Syd]

good read,i like it

[-[Zach]-]

thanks man. your comment is much appreciated

[Steve Spag]

Wow man, pretty dope verse I must admit. You captured your emotions perfectly in that peice, and a lot that I could relate to.

"more help is what we need 'cause greed
only feeds corrupted minds addicted to weed"

That's soo sick, hahaha.

Keep it up dude, and thanks for checkin' out my new peice.

[-[Zach]-]

thank you alot for that comment man. very appreciated. gald you could relate to it and glad you liked those lines lol

and your welcome man.