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Unthinkin Men (Unfinished)

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Unthinkin Men (Unfinished)

Postby Ka0t1c » Jun 2nd, '08, 21:00

unthinkin men are livin in a hidden kingdom within so it's a prison to them, a simple den
cuz minions are sent to dispense the sin which is intense to prevent wisdom against
the wickedness amidst so your missions forfeit cuz many forget their original sense
of givin your one hundred percent at any particular niche from beginnin to finish
of your entrance to exit, don't get rid of your interests, don't pretend you're content
when you're missin purpose cuz then really hectic, intense and just wreckless by tricks
your decisions select a different script than what friends remember you've left at...
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Unthinkin Men (Unfinished)

Postby Kosovic » Jun 3rd, '08, 22:48

I didnt understand a thing.
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Re: Unthinkin Men (Unfinished)

Postby Darkblade44431 » Jun 18th, '08, 02:34

flow was off a bit,but idk if u dtarted dif. place than i thought. good lyrics
uh...also i think lines were too long
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