4 Freestyles :)

[Solace]

Hey people. Here are 3 freestyles, they arent too great, but remember to have constructive critism!

i ran up on this guys lawn, slapped him with a gun, in 2 minutes i was completely gone
ran into a pawn shop, noticed a cop, ran the fuck out when i almost dropped
ran into a gap, so damn fast, i took a top, popped outta there i almost had a heart attack
listened to some pop, i was like what the fuck, backstreet fags are all i can find these days
ran into hmv, took slims CD, are you kidding me the manager saw me
security took me when i tried to flee
i showed them the bird called them turds and took off my shirt
whipped their backs before they could attack i only wished i had a gat
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when i rhyme you be disappearing like David Blaine
then you put on baggy clothes and act like lil wayne
your face is a scary motherfucker i might go insane
ill pop into a club and pour some refreshin' champagne
im not showing off im just trying to entertain
you're always pretending to be cool smoking a sugar cane
smack you in face, no pain no gain
this is some sad shit pretending you can rhyme
come on try again dont be ashamed its just ya 60th time

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im amazing with the cap gone backwards
smack you out cuz u justa wack rapper
you look like a bitch plus your style annoys
you rap like a cunt plus i cant stand ya voice
dont continue rapping you have a choice
become a lawyer, instead of a wannabe royce
ever since you met me youve wanted to be me
but you resist and instead go out and buy some exstacy
your so drugged outta ya mind, rapping against me just like your blind
you pretend to be marshall but youre not slim shady
ima expose your true sex, your just a lady
most of your shit you just copied and pasted
you cant rhyme just face it
if i met you in real life youd choke
ahah this is funny your such a fuckin joke
now relax here have a smoke
in fact here take this bag of coke
these things are great for your folk
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this wasnt supposed to happen and never will again
i dont ever wanna see a friend shot to his end
im having a flash back, i can hear him shout
see his dead body, blood is pouring out!
i didnt give up then i tried to get him up
man havent i already been through enough
well lifes tough and whining aint helping me cope
i might have to go back to selling dope
cuz i relied on that man and now hes gone
his last sights were of a fuckin gun
i called for ambulance but they came too late
they said they couldnt help his current state
dead on arrival, shot by a rival
well lets see how much a knife helps
stab that man and leave him for dead
he deserves everything he gets

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What's Your Opinion On Them, Eh?

PS. I used 2 lines from KillahGoat in the 3rd freestyle.

[Solace]

Does that mean i cant spell? Or i should use a better diction

[Solace]

Good point. Ah...Time to learn some new words...Ill wait for school >.>

[<Stiiccy>]

i couldnt really follow why exactly you were running lol
there could have been more multis and the bars were a lil fucked up..
it was ok, but needs alot of work...but since its a freestyle

[Solace]

really i dont no why i was like "ran into...". Its a freestyle, and i just kept on doing that till i couldnt think of something else. And thanks for at least checking it out

[Emadyville]

Not bad for a freestyle I guess, liked the backstreet fags comment tho lol

[Solace]

haha thanks. Okay check it out there are 2 more freestlyes i added.

[Jay-19]

im amazing with the cap gone backwards
smack you out cuz u justa wack rapper


It seems like you read my post "Just Rhyming" and stole some ideas, huh? Write your own shit.

[Solace]

yes sorry it was a freestyle that my friend was pressuring me on since he said i cant rhyme. So its all i could think of. I also took an eminem line, right after that. But the rest is mine. I apologize.

EDIT: i wouldnt mind deleteing your lines if you want. Or pointing them out that i used yours.

[Jay-19]

You don't need to delete it. I just pointed out that it was kind of my line. Sorry if I came on to you like an asshole. I was in a bad mood at the time. It's all good.

[Solace]

Lol no problem If i happen to say another persons lines ill inform them before posting

[Jay-19]

Lol no problem If i happen to say another persons lines ill inform them before posting

Yeah, that's probably a good idea, so people don't get pissed off.

[Solace]

Okay Also im adding a 4th freestyle. Thought of it while listening to Like Toy Soldiers (but it doesnt flow the best).

[Darkblade44431]

flow was off, some decent rhymes for freestyles though, and yeh u should probably get familiar with more words 2.

[Solace]

Thanks for the feedback