The Girl In the Corner

[TheWeirdoIsBack]

Okay so I wrote this for a friend of mine. I think it's alright, but I have a rewritten version in my notebook thats a lot better that I'm saving for my album ((which is finally getting off the ground production and lyric wise)). But I've gotten a lot of positive feedback on the original, and I just wanted to get some real reviews from people that DON'T know me personally. If anyone gets a sec, let me know what you think. Props in advance, and I'll return all favors.


Theres a pretty little girl sittin by herself all alone/Just chillin in the corner of a room starin at her phone/Waiting for a call she knows will never come/She's waiting for a boy to call but feeling kind of dumb/She thinks he'll never call she thinks shes too ugly/This girl is really unhappy/She doesn't wanna live her life no more she's sick and tired of it/That's why you'll find her in the corner just a sit/She looks back on her life and thinks her life is meaningless/Everyday her will to move is intact less and less/She hates the girl in the mirror and wishes she'd leave/She walks up to her loves with her heart on her sleeve/And walks away with nothing but shattered hope/She sits and she mopes/She just can't cope/With what her life has become she's still just waiting/Its all these cliques and relationships she sees she's hating/She doesn't believe she's good enough for life/She keeps having these thoughts of reaching for a knife/She can't take it anymore and runs from her corner crying/Still nobody knows but inside she's dieing/She grabs her fathers gun and puts it to her head/Screams "The world'll be better when I'm dead!"/And just as she pulls the trigger and a lone shot is heard in the black/Her phone starts ringing...the boy called her back...

[TheWeirdoIsBack]

be ready to get called emo on this forum...any hint of emotion on here and these bastards will eat you up

but lucky for you, I like songs like this

She walks up to her loves with her heart on her sleeve

I'm guessing you meant "love"

the lyrics are very simple, but you were trying to get your message across to people so you skipped over being very lyrical

the ending made it feel like one of those damn myspace bulletins that fucking people post lol

but I liked it, nice simple stuff, it would/will be a good song recorded

Haha the emo thing has been spread about me more times than I can count, I'm ready for any and all accusations

But for real, thanks a lot for the feed bro, extremely appreciate it

[JMG]

Dear Diary

Mood: Apathetic

My life is spiraling downward
I couldn't get enough money to go to the Blood Red Romance and Suffocate Me Dry concert
It sucks cause they play some of my favorite songs like "Stab my heart because I love you" and "Rip apart my soul" and of course "Stabby rip stab stab" And It doesn’t help that I couldn’t get my hair to do that flippy thing either… like that guy from that band can do… some days...

I’m an emo kid, non-conforming as can be
You’d be non-conforming too if you look just like me
I have paint on my nails and makeup on my face
I’m almost emo enough to start shaving my legs
Cause I feel real deep when I'm dressing in drag
I call it freedom of expression, most just call me a fag
'Cause our dudes look like chicks and chicks look like dykes
Cause emo is one step below transvestite

Stop my breathing and slit my throat
I must be emo

I don’t jump around when I go to shows
I must be emo

I’m dark and sensitive with low self esteem
The way I dress makes everyday feel like Halloween
I have no real problems but I like to make believe
I stole my sister’s mascara now I’m grounded for a week
Sulking and writing poetry are my hobbies
I can’t get through a hawthorne heights album without sobbing
Girls keep breaking up with me, it’s never any fun
They say they already have a pussy, they don’t need another one

Stop my breathing and slit my throat
I must be emo

I don’t jump around when I go to shows
I must be emo

Dye in my hair and polish on my toes
I must be emo

I play guitar and write suicide notes
I must be emo

my life is just a black abyss... ya know..it’s so dark. And it’s suffocating me, grabbing a hold of me and tightening its grip, tighter than a pair of my little sisters jeans...which look great on me by the way.

When I get depressed I cut my wrist in every direction
Hearing songs about getting dumped gives me an erection
I write in a live journal and wear thick rimmed glasses
I tell my friends I bleed black and cry during classes
I’m just a bad, cheap imitation of goth
You can read me “Catcher in the Rye” and watch me jack off
I wear skin tight clothes while hating my life
If I said that I like girls I’d only be half right

I look like I’m dead and dress like a homo
I must be emo

Screw xbox I play old school Nintendo
I must be emo

I like to whine and hate my parentals
I must be emo

Me and my friends all look like clones
I must be emo

My parents don’t get me ya know
They think I’m gay just because they saw me kiss a guy… well, a couple guys …but still, I mean it’s the 2000’s, can’t two…or 4 dudes make out with each other without being gay
I mean, chicks dig that kinda thing anyways
I don’t know diary, sometimes I think you are the only one that gets me…you’re my best friend

[TheWeirdoIsBack]

@ Chet ; Thanks again bro, glad to be back

@ JMG ; Suffocate Me Dry is my favorite band!! Dude its like you ripped that right out of my journal! By the way, it is a JOURNAL! Not a diary. I wonder why my wrists hurt...