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Superstar

Postby mcZu » Jun 26th, '08, 13:45

I wrote this one last night :8)

When I walk up to the light
I feel blinded by the sight
of the spot light, I might
slip 'cause I don't see a thing
but I feel my body reacting
all at it self, like the light
trigert some kind of automatic
mechanisme,
I walk up to the stage
feeling like I'm walking in a cage
surounded by bars made of the audience out there
feeling like a convict, burning holes
of the spotlight on my face and hair
But when the beat kicks in
the door of the cage starts opening
the beat go's on and on
and the door keeps opening up
I reach to the mic, ready for my entrance
The spotlight stops dazzling my performence
The light seems to be backing me up from the back
the audience is cheering, I succeeded in my task
the beat starts to fade away trough the noise
I turn around, and I slow up my flow and voice
as I fade away trough the light, like diming the lights of a car
only thing left is the crowd screaming 'SUPERSTAR'......

What do y'all think?.. :sweating:
Any constructive advice/feed is welcome :)
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Re: Superstar

Postby Darkblade44431 » Jun 26th, '08, 16:43

rhymes kinda overused, idk, just feel like a lot of ppl r doin songs like this. ummm....sorry i am no help
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Re: Superstar

Postby $0 R3@L » Jun 27th, '08, 15:56

should be mcNothingnew :y:
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Re: Superstar

Postby JMG » Jun 27th, '08, 18:39

damn son that shit was straight fire
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Re: Superstar

Postby mcZu » Jun 27th, '08, 19:52

thnx JMG :D

I checked out your lyrics, they are sick man :y:
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Re: Superstar

Postby dontapproachme » Jun 27th, '08, 19:53

they wer pretty cool :y:
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Re: Superstar

Postby JMG » Jun 27th, '08, 20:11

thanks man im bout to take over this forum
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Re: Superstar

Postby Kosovic » Jun 27th, '08, 20:23

JMG wrote:thanks man im bout to take over this forum


ur oh so gangstuh
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Re: Superstar

Postby JMG » Jun 27th, '08, 20:39

ill up but a hack in ur bitch ass for poppin them keys off
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Re: Superstar

Postby Kosovic » Jun 27th, '08, 20:55

The only thing u will manage to do will be to fart of my dog's dick, when he will assrape you.
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Re: Superstar

Postby mcZu » Jun 27th, '08, 21:00

dontapproachme wrote:they wer pretty cool :y:


tnx dontapproachme :y:
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Re: Superstar

Postby JMG » Jun 27th, '08, 21:04

dont u no that u cant rape the willin
come with me if u wanna make a million
were gonna rob bill gates and donald trump
put ur bottles up with ur lighter flames
cuz were goin in that bitch like a fighter plane
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Re: Superstar

Postby Kosovic » Jun 27th, '08, 21:58

I am not impressed.
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Re: Superstar

Postby JMG » Jun 27th, '08, 22:21

damn oh well it was worth a shot
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Re: Superstar

Postby Kosovic » Jun 27th, '08, 22:32

Yeah well....u dont impress. Find something better to do in ur life.
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