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[JMG]

im high as hell tryin to tell the difference
from the minute and the 2nd hand
the weather man is predictin lightin
when im writing its incisin
so sit tight an learn im sick like a germ
its like fish bitin worms i just reel um in
ill make steal from tin and the wheel will spin
till i get my fortune and raise up my earnings
i cant go bank rupt cuz im to determinend
ive been though the dirt an draged though mud
now im on the ground prayin thats enough
salvation has to come god please help me up
before i self destruct
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this is just a verse that im pickin a part and addin to songs
so what do u think

[Emadyville]

I liked the message and the flow, rhymes weren't great but they weren't bad either

[Xray]

few lines rhymed, thought you were better than this?

[Kosovic]

Sure sure...ok. I mean its good for the site. +1 thread, +3-4 posts.

[JMG]

uh few lines rhymed every damn line in there rhymed , no it dont line up properly but i dont give a fuck.

[Kosovic]

Let me guess: "you dont give a fuck" because you are "dope and ill" and you say "fuck haters" and your favorite motto is "i am what i am".

Riiiiiiiiiiiiiiiight, this new black/hiphop culture makes me wanna jump from the last floor.

[JMG]

well bein the best on tr i think i should be held to higher standards

[Solace]

heres an example of non rhyming:

"im high as hell tryin to tell the difference
from the minute and the 2nd hand"

Difference. Hand.

"the weather man is predictin lightin
when im writing its incisin"

Lighting. Incisin.

"so sit tight an learn im sick like a germ
its like fish bitin worms i just reel um in"

Germ. In.

"ill make steal from tin and the wheel will spin
till i get my fortune and raise up my earnings"

Spin. Earnings.

"i cant go bank rupt cuz im to determinend
ive been though the dirt an draged though mud"

Determined. Mud. That one is the one thats closest to rhyming other than germ+in, to me.

"now im on the ground prayin thats enough
salvation has to come god please help me up
before i self destruct"

Enough. Up. That one is alright

[JMG]

yeah like i said it dont line up properly,dont try to school me. im tired of people focusin on strucute instead of the lyrics them self. fuckin tryin to give me examples and shit wastin ur time, if u got that much time get on ur knees and suck my dick.

[Solace]

yeah like i said it dont line up properly,dont try to school me. im tired of people focusin on strucute instead of the lyrics them self. fuckin tryin to give me examples and shit wastin ur time, if u got that much time get on ur knees and suck my dick.

why at u mad at me? it doesnt rhyme. unless maybe you could put in bold the words that rhyme maybe? i dont wanna start a fight

edit: im not saying you cant rhyme, ive seen other stuff by you and they all rhyme

[JMG]

ok well what im tryin to say is i no ''differance'' and ''hand'' don't rhyme, thats ovious and im stressin lyrics and flow not stucture.

[Solace]

ok well what im tryin to say is i no ''differance'' and ''hand'' don't rhyme, thats ovious and im stressin lyrics and flow not stucture.

oh ok sorry for the misunderstanding.

edit: well the lyrics and flow are pretty good. i like the uhh let say story of your lyrics. Sad.

[JMG]

thanks but most of the shit i drop on he is nothin wait till my album drops, i dont think ppl are gonna be ready for it

[Solace]

thanks but most of the shit i drop on he is nothin wait till my album drops, i dont think ppl are gonna be ready for it

when do you plan on releasing it?

[Kosovic]

thanks but most of the shit i drop on he is nothin wait till my album drops, i dont think ppl are gonna be ready for it

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