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Re: Hot 16

Postby Arabian Shady » Aug 5th, '08, 21:20

new shit bro
that was reali reali good,real deep rhymes and good flow but it sounded a lot like a poem.i mean it flowed right but i felt it was like a poem or sumthing,but that could be me
sick shit man :y:
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Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
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Re: Hot 16

Postby Steve Spag » Aug 5th, '08, 22:09

That's pretty hot shit man. You had some killer lines in there and you used a wide-vocab which is always good. You kept it pretty fresh and I like the messege you're sending. I especailly like these lines:

"cause affection is not affection if sex is all we can find,
and till were left alone matchless, on a mattress of lies,
It's self belligerency to feel that are sins couldn't speak,
and seek a reason for existence in the mist of the sea,"

That's some pretty sick stuff man.
Keep it up :y:.
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Re: Hot 16

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 5th, '08, 22:21

its warm, lol its clever
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Hot 16

Postby Rain Matrix » Aug 6th, '08, 02:40

cleverly written... real nice man
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Re: Hot 16

Postby Xray » Aug 6th, '08, 03:01

loved the flow man, i can tell you went for a different flow to your normal flows on this one. which is why i like it :D

crazy 16 man
and seek a reason for existence in the mist of the sea,
and see if we can see through sans, are ancestors seeked,
an insane sanity weeps, for the sane cells of deceit,
step to check the sight, exceptional tales kept in the seap,
see the strings of life get distached and latched to our seed,

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