New shit... check it...

[The GameKeeper]

I got em sick to they stomach, poppin mylanta
bystandards shitcha pants better buy pampers
D Lucks the GameKeeper, I spit the fly grammar
plus Im known to catch wreck like Princess Diana
Ill pull a 211 and Ill smile for the camera
shoot up the place while Im screamin and walk out in a mild manner(damn)
I got a plan son my style is witty
and my pants still sag like Ant Jamimas titties
my minds still crisp cuz Im higher than Whitney
without the black eyes at 50

Just started a new verse... what do you yall think so far? The problem with me is I am too critical of my own shit and it takes me a while to try and perfect my flow and get my lyrics right... I just wrote this shit this morning so let me know what you think so far... I think its dope though its only 10 bars... just a start of a song where Im thowing all kinds of metaphors out and shit...

[Rain Matrix]

nice hell yeah!

[Xray]

nice punchlines

[Arabian Shady]

thats was pretty dope man,allmost like mainstream music nowdays,
keep it it
Peace

P.S:could you feed mine as well,its called LOOSE CHANGE

[Robbie G]

I liked it man, improvement definantly

[The GameKeeper]

I appreciate the feeback fellas...

[J Roc]

Was Ok ...... ..... Originality Is Wha People Should Aim For Though

[The GameKeeper]

J-Roc... I appreciate the fact you though it was ok but saying it was not original is flat out wrong my man... all I hear nowadays is all these whack ass southern rappers who talk about money and bitches... Im spittin true lyrical shit on this song... and that is something the game has been missing my friend...

[J Roc]

lol don't catch feelings ...... i said it was ok because u have potential ..... "and my pants still sag like Ant Jamimas titties " ..... Dat Line Was Pretty Funny Lol ....... Buuutt, Punchlines Need Ah Start Bein More Original ..... I Aint ah Hater ..... Cassidy Was Using That Kinda Stuff In Freestyles Years Ago lol ........ Its Better Then Most Mainstream But That Dosent Make It Fire ..... Lol My Thoughts, Keep Practisin

[The GameKeeper]

I gotcha... no hard feelins... im workin a this shit... nowadays trying to say shit people havent already said or come up w/ topics people havent touched on is a challenge my man